Love Or Lust

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Love Or Lust

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Fri Sep 22, 2006 9:10 pm

The choice we make.





Sultry eyes or innocent oculars?

A Lusty pout or a sincere smile?

Ridiculously Voluptuous Volumes or the maiden’s delicate slimness?

The lay of it is thus:

That one must conquer the other

For Love and Lust cannot dwell in similar housing at once

Though both are cousins to the other.

Lust is the lover of the bachelor

But love is the practice of the married man.

To lust men surrender nothing and are given all

But in love all is given and naught returned

For lest love be met with love all is frustrated.


In Lust, a man loses nothing, but slakes his own thirsty flesh

Lust is a heady wine that intoxicates those who drink too deeply.


But love is water clearer than laughter

Love is the dream of preachers and daughters

Love is the cascading blue pounding into the soul.


Lust is a cloudy haze of pink and red

But the passions of love are brilliant beyond reasoning.

Lust is a child disgracing the instruments

Yet love, plainly spoken, is a woman who knows and uses them full well.


Lust purports herself as a revealer of mysteries

As a stripper of honesty

She claims to remove our high minded “shacklesâ€
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby QtheQreater » Fri Sep 22, 2006 10:03 pm

Most of the time I can't understand your poetry and some of the time I really like what you've written...but this one is the best I've seen yet, Zarn. Good work...

It has very nice scriptural integration...
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Postby Anna Mae » Mon Oct 09, 2006 11:09 am

This is one of your better poems. My favorite line was : But love is water clearer than laughter
This has a Proverbial ring to it and has quite pleasing imagery.

If you, in reading this

Cannot discern the better

Than God himself has blinded you

That you may not read my letters
I wouldn't have chosen God as the one who blinds...

I also appreciated the mention of the ridiculous voluptuousness versus what women actually look like.
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Mon Oct 09, 2006 11:48 am

Well, God blinding them has some precidence, God turned the heart of Pharoah as to stone, promised to do the same with people who delayed in choosing him in Revelations, ect.
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Anna Mae » Mon Oct 09, 2006 12:43 pm

Ah, and now we get into sticky theological interpretation issues.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Mon Oct 09, 2006 12:57 pm

Or we could gently tip toe away from it.
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Anna Mae » Mon Oct 09, 2006 1:51 pm

Splendid idea.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby Knives » Mon Oct 09, 2006 3:32 pm

That is a really good poem. Normally, I don't like poems, but I could relate to this one.
I like this line:
The warmth of her bed?

Or the Love of her heart?

Which matters more to me?
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Postby starstoryteller » Thu Nov 09, 2006 1:07 am

Sounds like someone was reading their bible :grin: . Zarn this is incredable. :thumb: I really like how you used the two woman in proverbs. One was Wisdom and she lead you to abundent life; while the other was Foolish and led one to death.
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