Collected haiku by Animus Seed

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Collected haiku by Animus Seed

Postby Animus Seed » Mon Oct 09, 2006 6:36 pm

(I like poetry, but haiku seems to be the only type I can write. Well, here you go.)


With a few short words,
Can seventeen syllables
Capture Your glory?

Captivate my heart
O Lord, keep my eyes fixed so
I can't look away.

I offer to him
A rotting heart, filled with cess.
He accepts with joy.

Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise;
Joy in the mourning.

Sin, you stupid beast,
Your hold on me is broken.
Must you whine so much?
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Postby Anna Mae » Sun Oct 15, 2006 5:54 pm

I just love haiku.

With a few short words,
Can seventeen syllables
Capture Your glory? I have written haiku with a similar theme. It's a good theme.

Captivate my heart
O Lord, keep my eyes fixed so
I can't look away. Another good theme. This one reminds me of that one hymn: Turn your eyes upon Jesus. Look full in his wonderful face, and the things of Earth will grow strangely dim in the light of his glory and grace.

I offer to him
A rotting heart, filled with cess.
He accepts with joy. I really like this one also. The hard thing about giving someone feelback about their haiku is that they're so short, one can make a comment or two about the theme... but then runs out of things to say.

Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise;
Joy in the mourning. I like this last line, but I am not sure what the haiku means collectively.

Sin, you sutpid beast,
Your hold on me is broken.
Must you whine so much?Heh. I liked the first two lines, but the third one made them even better. I especially like your imagery here.
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby creed4 » Sun Oct 15, 2006 6:24 pm

very good
Tis No Fool to lose what he can not keep to gain what he can never lose.
What does it profit a man to gain the World yet lose his soul.
Choose Life that you Might live.
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Postby Animus Seed » Mon Oct 16, 2006 7:18 pm

Anna Mae wrote:
Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise]I like this last line, but I am not sure what the haiku means collectively.[/b]



Honestly? I don't know either. I wrote it at a time when everything in my life was all peachy-keen, but I was depressed for no reason anyway. I wish someone could explain my own poem to me.

Sin, you sutpid beast,
Your hold on me is broken.
Must you whine so much?Heh. I liked the first two lines, but the third one made them even better. I especially like your imagery here.


This is an attempt to write in the style of Kobayashi Issa, my favorite haiku-ist and one of my favorite poets in general. I think it's something like what he would write.
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Postby Animus Seed » Wed Oct 18, 2006 1:27 pm

By the by, here's a couple Issa poems for comparison. Note that after translation, the syllable count doesn't match anymore.

Spring thaw--
The village is flooded
With children

All the time I pray
To Buddha, I keep on
Stomping spiders

Sadly, this is the poem Issa wrote on his death-bed:

A bath when you're born
A bath when you die--
How stupid.

Issa never was satisfied with Buddhism, but it was the only religion he knew and he tried to follow it piously his whole life.
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Postby Sparrowhawk » Wed Oct 18, 2006 1:41 pm

"Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise;
Joy in the mourning."

That was my favorite of yours. I admit I don't get the second line, but the joy of Christ in the midst of sorrow is a great theme.
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Where many paths and errands meet.
And whither then? I cannot say."
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Postby Animus Seed » Wed Oct 18, 2006 5:44 pm

Since I'm getting some good feedback, I'll post some more:

Announce the wedding
Without delay---at last! Lamb
And Bride together.

Leprous heart, poisoned
Soul---I wither at a touch.
He finds me lovely.

(this next one's more of a proper haiku, since it has a natural and seasonal reference)

Is it only birds
That will sing to You praises
At first light of spring?

(next, another Issa attempt)

The devil I served
Wants me to go back to him.
I couldn't care less.
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Postby Anna Mae » Sun Nov 05, 2006 4:45 pm

Announce the wedding
Without delay---at last! Lamb
And Bride together. Once again, the last line containes the crucial twist.

Leprous heart, poisoned
Soul---I wither at a touch.
He finds me lovely. I really do like these poems quite a lot.

Is it only birds
That will sing to You praises
At first light of spring? Once again, this is really good. I like how you give such a short verse a profound challenge and application to our lives.

The devil I served
Wants me to go back to him.
I couldn't care less. Your last lines are really excellent. I enjoy reading your haikus! I hope that you continue to post them.
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby Animus Seed » Sun Nov 19, 2006 6:48 pm

Not a worship one this time. Instead, I'm going to post a haiku I wrote regarding my Greek Philosophy/Old Testament Beginnings class, in celebration of the completion of my big term paper on the Iliad. (The Iliad, in case you didn't know, is a really long poem by some dude named Homer that takes about 12 hours to recite out loud.)

I soon realize
Upon finishing Homer--
I prefer haiku.
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Postby Ratrace » Tue Nov 28, 2006 9:54 am

It took me not long
To see that you're the master
Of very good haiku

Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise;
Joy in the mourning
I might not get what you want from that, but I dont think its that hard to understand.
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Postby Animus Seed » Wed Nov 29, 2006 1:08 pm

Ratrace wrote:It took me not long
To see that you're the master
Of very good haiku


I thank you, but I
Can't help but notice that last
Extra syllable. ^_^
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Postby Animus Seed » Tue Dec 05, 2006 5:43 pm

[quote="Animus Seed"]
Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise]

Okay, here's a perfect example of what this poem means to me. I went through some bad holiday-fallout and was in a really bad mood for a week. Really bad mood. Like, I couldn't even eat. But I'm fine now. And, funny, now that I'm in a good mood again, now I take the time to write poetry about my experience. And, seriously, as different as these are from the earlier ones I posted, I swear up-and-down that I am, in fact, in a good mood right now. And, despite the pessimistic tone of these, I do in fact consider them to praise God in some way. So, with that said:

So, it seems the gard-
-'Ner who tends Dante's forest
Is absent today.

Drowning in a lake
With no name. I reach my hand
Out---nothing to grasp.
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Postby Ratrace » Fri Dec 08, 2006 11:10 am

That syllable was
Not noticed by my slow brain
I am embarassed.
A closed mouth gathers no feet.
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Postby Anna Mae » Sun Dec 24, 2006 12:41 pm

I can sympathize.
Haiku are so short; I tend
to run out of syl-


I soon realize
Upon finishing Homer--
I prefer haiku. Clever. I like it.

So, it seems the gard-
-'Ner who tends Dante's forest
Is absent today. Unfortunately I have not studied Dante yet, so I do not fully grasp the meaning of this poem.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby Animus Seed » Wed Jan 10, 2007 10:31 pm

Anna Mae wrote:So, it seems the gard-
-'Ner who tends Dante's forest
Is absent today. Unfortunately I have not studied Dante yet, so I do not fully grasp the meaning of this poem.


The "forest" in Dante is the 7th Circle of Hell; the Forest of Suicides. No one's guarding it. I.e., "What's to stop me from killing myself?" Asking myself that question seriously, it turned out the answer was, "Lots of things!" and then I was in a good mood. :angel:
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Postby Animus Seed » Tue Jan 23, 2007 10:24 am

[quote="anonymous"]
=\ this one:
"Weep without despair.
Bittersweet the strangest praise]

I like that reading.

These next three are one poem:

"Paulo Maiora Canamus"
("I shall sing of greater things")

To start, I shall sing
Of the goodness of wisdom
That ordains justice.

And second I’ll sing
The beauty of love itself,
And the day love died.

Then in conclusion
I’ll sing loudly of truth, and
The power Truth holds.
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Postby Anna Mae » Sun Feb 18, 2007 5:07 pm

In what language is the title?
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby Fish and Chips » Sun Feb 18, 2007 5:13 pm

Is this all there is
To writing a good Haiku?
Just counting fingers?

Seems rather silly
that such simple trickery
could form such a ryhme.
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Postby Anna Mae » Sun Feb 18, 2007 5:41 pm

I like the bit about counting fingers.
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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Postby Animus Seed » Tue Feb 20, 2007 11:26 pm

Anna Mae wrote:In what language is the title?


That's Latin. I stole it; it's the opening line from the Roman poet Virgil's "Fourth Ecologue."
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