New chapter in fic

[Slater]

I have completed the 9th chapter in my first fanfiction, leaving me 1 more to do before its completion. This chapter is called "Power of the Dragonflame." Here's a single scene snippet from it... y'might find it useful...

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(Setting: Mobius, and mostly America, has been ravaged by a war between good and evil for about 20 years now. Nack and his cousin Rocky were officers on the good side of the army, named Holy Thunderforce, but had been captured on a recon mission and have been placed in a dungeon of sorts to be tortured seemingly to no end thanks to the enemy's hatred for them. The persona is none other than Nack the Weasel, as he and his cousin are chained to a wall...

Another day, was it? I don’t know. I didn’t care. I just hated life it seemed. Every moment that I wasn’t in chains or strapped to a tabletop, I was being beat up. It wasn’t fair. I got slashed by chains, half drowned, prodded with hot pieces of metal and cubes of ice, and any other form of torture that I had even heard about... well, almost. Poor Nic* wasn’t so lucky...

One time, Rocky and I saw the slightest bit of light at the end of the tunnel... Boyer**, the one who was in charge of our torture, ordered a small group of his men to beat us up in an unfair fight. They put us in a room and shoved us around a little bit, jeering at us and waiting for us to snap. We did eventually and a fight broke out, which was what they wanted. And suddenly, almost spontaneously, both Rocky and I disarmed two of the assailants from their nightsticks. We clubbed and clubbed and clubbed until we couldn’t club no more. Rocky cracked one of their heads and two of their jaws, and I broke a good number of ribs and hands through my fight, but it was just a matter of time before someone decided to beat us, and they did so by shooting Rocky through the stomach with a laser pistol. They threatened to kill him if I didn’t drop it, so I did just that. Why oh why did I do that? I bet that they would have killed us both if I kept going... that would have been a good thing... or so I thought.

They slapped us both up in chains after that, hanging us from the wall with both our hands and feet held fast. I cannot tell you how mind numbingly boring and depressing that was. “Hey, look Jim!â€