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My poems

Postby faithfighter » Wed Feb 23, 2005 1:54 pm

Here are somepoems I wrote, please say something good or badI'd like to know what you think!

My shadow behind me lies,
From it’s fiery mouth comes angry cries.
Its eyes are a blaze,
With a furious daze,
We’re at constant war,
Bad is the score.
Inferno like rage,
In my shadow cage.
Spreading irritation,
Across all the nations.
Eclipsing the sun,
Destroying all fun.
The phantom which follows,
Leaves me empty and hollow.
Anguished gloom.
Rage brings doom.
But I have hope.
In Jesus, my rope.
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Postby faithfighter » Wed Feb 23, 2005 1:55 pm

I'll post more of them later.
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Postby Magekind » Wed Feb 23, 2005 4:25 pm

Fair, fair...
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby faithfighter » Thu Feb 24, 2005 5:54 pm

Why Fair fair?
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Postby LostChild » Thu Feb 24, 2005 8:19 pm

that was awesome! i would have never thought of writing something like that. keep up the great work!
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Postby girlninja » Fri Feb 25, 2005 10:56 am

*smile good job ^_^ heh though i'm not into rhyme in a poetry *Mainly becuz i can't articulately rhyme and make the poem how i want it* lol but i like it ^^ keep it up ^^ look forward to more
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Postby faithfighter » Thu Mar 10, 2005 9:46 am

Thanks guys!!!!
Here is another 1. This is my newest and only one that doesn't rhyme. Its diferent then all my others.

I know it could have been different,
you didn't have to act like that.
With all the things you say,
I have a right to just stay away.
I know God wants us to beforgiving,
And with our lives to keep on living.
Why did you,
Act like this?
What did I do?
Why did you say those things?
Why did you have to hurt me?
I wish things were different.
I wish you hadn't acted like that.
I wish you don't say what you say.
I wish I could just stay away.
But I won't stay away.
Cause I love you.
Even with the things you say and do.
But I won't stay away.
Cause you need me.
Thats what God would want me to do.

I know this is very different then any I have ever made but I wanted to try something new.

More to come if they are wanted.
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Postby Ssjjvash » Thu Mar 10, 2005 10:53 am

Good job, Faithfighter! This last one reminds me of one of a few poems I've written.
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

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Postby girlninja » Fri Mar 11, 2005 9:58 am

^_^ i like faithfighter ^^ heh you gave me an idea to write a poem on that subject actually ^_^ forgive me for the idea stealing ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^

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Postby faithfighter » Fri Mar 11, 2005 3:50 pm

No prob steal away/
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