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Postby girlninja » Thu Apr 21, 2005 3:57 am

Furnace

With its rapturous flames
in a unique melody
these flames of redepmtion
they wash over me

Flooding me
refining me as pure as silver
they purge the darkness from my body
its the altar call

Washing through me
Pierce my soul
oh redeeming nature of God
place me as a living sacrifice
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^

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Postby Magekind » Sat Apr 23, 2005 4:59 pm

First verse/stanza/was'sthing is just lovely.

Last one has a typo.

Can't believe this thing got this far down the list without a few comments.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby girlninja » Sun Apr 24, 2005 7:06 am

heh fixed the typo ^^ thanks for the compliment magekind ^_^ makes me happy
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous

and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance:

WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede

ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin

:jump: :lol: :thumb:

"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II

98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.

*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^

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Postby Cedahlia » Wed Apr 27, 2005 7:30 pm

What a wonderful poem!! I love the second stanza. n.n Great job.
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