2 Corinthians 4:18
So fix our eyes not on what is seen but what is unseen. For what is seen is temporary but what is unseen is eternal.
Prelude
If asked, Gwen Pride would say she had it all. She was popular, rich, and had many friends and even a super cute boyfriend. So how come she felt so empty? This is her story, about how he changed her life forever…
Chapter 1: The Price of Being a Brat.
It was the last day of school finally! Gwen walked home with her boyfriend hand in hand.
“So I will see you when you get back from Paris with you Dad right?â€
A Change of Heart
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A Change of Heart
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Chapter 2: The Unwanted Hero
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€
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[quote="faithfighter"]Chapter 2: The Unwanted Hero
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€
“Hey there beautiful. You’re that Pride girl right? How much money have ya got on ya?â€
Headbangers United
"There is no surer sign of decay in a country than to see the rites of religion held in contempt." - Niccolo Machiavelli
"But even as Josue and Caleb declared that the Land of Promise was good and fair, and that the possession of it would be easy and pleasant; so the Holy Spirit, speaking by all the Saints, and our Blessed Lord Himself assure us that a devout life is a lovely, a pleasant, and a happy life." - from An Introduction to the Devout Life, by St. Francis de Sales
Loyal subject of Sakura-hime, the RP Princess.
CR-chan's faithful PNC.
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"There is no surer sign of decay in a country than to see the rites of religion held in contempt." - Niccolo Machiavelli
"But even as Josue and Caleb declared that the Land of Promise was good and fair, and that the possession of it would be easy and pleasant; so the Holy Spirit, speaking by all the Saints, and our Blessed Lord Himself assure us that a devout life is a lovely, a pleasant, and a happy life." - from An Introduction to the Devout Life, by St. Francis de Sales
Loyal subject of Sakura-hime, the RP Princess.
CR-chan's faithful PNC.
FF-chan's NiichanB.
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Steeltemplar - Posts: 1373
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[quote="faithfighter"]“That’s because he is behind you.â€
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
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Ssjjvash - Posts: 1073
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Ssjjvash wrote:This is good so far, but this paragraph kinda confused me because you mixed first person with third person point of view.
Yep, its great
Lol, same here, that paragraph confused me a bit.
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Ssjjvash wrote:This is good so far, but this paragraph kinda confused me because you mixed first person with third person point of view.
Actually, it switched to first a couple of times. Once then and once at the very end.
So far so good, just keep an eye on your tenses.
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thats why yoou should never write at 1:00 in the morning..and always proof read...I am so bad about that...I will clear it up later..sorry no time now..but i will rewrite that..glad yoou liked it though. oh and never rush progress...3 things I learned from this not so wonderful story *sigh*
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That's understandable if it was one in the morning!! ^^ The story really isn't that bad, though. We await the rest. *salutes*
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
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Ssjjvash - Posts: 1073
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yes it was 1 in the morning..or later...Ican't rember...I should be up late like that..but...*sigh*
any way writers block has taken this story to...ahhhhhhhhh!
any way writers block has taken this story to...ahhhhhhhhh!
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