Ronin Concepts

[Solid Ronin]

HUTTAH!

After thinking for awhile I've decided to make my own little concept thread filled with my little concepts for many many stories. I hope you enjoy them and make sure to poke at all things you may see wrong with the plot.

First Concept!...Zion: Third World

My old story of the homeless hero in a brand new world...

In this story America will have become a third world nation on a count of gutless presidents and naive people. Russia will have taken over the entire west coast but have stopped thier invasion due to a civil war. Like many stories before all major companies have taken the place of the goverment leaving the poor to rot in the gettho where the only law thier are the gangs.
Zion lives to protect the weak not because they need it but only to try to combat his own personal demons.

Second Concept: Yasai

In my own fantasy world a The Tpapu Samurai clan is the most feared and evil family the world as ever known. Although they have no real nation they are connected in all forms of crime and the down right disturbing.

A young Tpapu sercetly reads a forbiden book known to the family as "Red Letters". His mind is now open to his familyies evil he takes it apon himself to personaly kill all traces of the Tpapu clan.

Well thats it for now feel free to ask more about either stories world.

[Magekind]

Both are fairly interesting stories, and both would take some considerable thought to make it past the first few chapters. You're good at coming up with protagonists and interesting long-term situations, the hard part now is coming up with the, "what happens next" part of the stories. Good luck.

[Syreth]

I think those are both very good ideas. The Zion one sounds very interesting. I'm sort of running across the "what happens next" dealie with a story I'm working on. I just have to sit down and get it figured out one of these days.

[Solid Ronin]

I'm not sure by what you mean by "What happens next" If your typing of what will happen next in the stories. They would both be single arc stories..if thats what you mean.

[Magekind]

Y'know, that sounds like you're a bit lost. "What happens next" is what takes a story from concept to reality. The decisive actions taken by characters to obtain their goals. The ideas you have are good ideas, and I will note they sound like the kind that end up being a two- or three-season televised series.

[Solid Ronin]

Y'know, that sounds like you're a bit lost. "What happens next" is what takes a story from concept to reality. The decisive actions taken by characters to obtain their goals. The ideas you have are good ideas, and I will note they sound like the kind that end up being a two- or three-season televised series.

Thats the point..It wouldnt go one for long..a mini sries..its all I do..

Zion: This will be told in a "Day in the life" kinda story for awhile so I can get everything nice and set up for the reader until I introduced the first and final arc

Yasai:Once again..set up but no real arc..the entire story would be one huge arc really..

[uc pseudonym]

I understand what you mean by having a single-arced story, and that often works fairly well. However, given that you are doing that, I'd urge you to give the plot serious consideration. Because it isn't a serial, lengthy series, you can make the plot far more coherent while being deeper. Consider carefully before beginning.

As was said before, do you have the "what happens next" planned? How does our young Tpapu begin his quest? What is the fundamental difficulty he faces (other than numerous, lethal samurai)?

[Solid Ronin]

I understand what you mean by having a single-arced story, and that often works fairly well. However, given that you are doing that, I'd urge you to give the plot serious consideration. Because it isn't a serial, lengthy series, you can make the plot far more coherent while being deeper. Consider carefully before beginning.

As was said before, do you have the "what happens next" planned? How does our young Tpapu begin his quest? What is the fundamental difficulty he faces (other than numerous, lethal samurai)?

Oh yeah im not makin the same mistake I did with CAA Island...

Well now that you put like that I can answer.

Kuo will begin by after reading the entire red letters in his home..afterward he will send for his page and tell her to fetch his sister and katana. After killing his sister he burns thier houes and begin likfe as a "ronin" slowly making his way toward his father and mother.

As for adversity most of it will be his own families private army and his extended family (cousins, uncles, etc.)

As for freind kuo will be joined by a Martial artist who althought is very street smart he cannot read nor knows the differences between a man and woman.

A traveling magican o joins Kuo for "The hell of it"

There are two other characters but I havent given them much thought yet.

As it comes to depth I wanted to keep most of this sercet until it came out but it seems thats not the way things turned out.

[tirshek]

I believe that you have some definate possiblities. with work these could be some real Keepers.

[Solid Ronin]

This story is for readers 14+

KY House 6 years old

Yesturday I was adobted by my new moma Jesseka shes vere pretty, and she nice and she smells good and she has two other kids with her and she told me she is 16 years old.

When she got me ,from a far away place, we were walking. through the town when three men came from the sides of the street and asked her to give them something that I dont know what it is. we were all scared and we didnt move any. Thats when an other man came up from behind us and said something to the other men that moma jesseka told me to forget.

THe men yelled other things that moma jessyca told me to forget and the men made a sirkal a round the man that came from behind us. He was dress with the colur of the night with a water clour shirt but his jacket and shoes and pants were night colur.

The three men runed to him and the night clour man put his hand in one of one of the mens neck and he fell the the ground and didnt get up. the other two men knocked the NCM ( NCM means night colur man cause i dont want to write it all the time) to the ground. the NCM but his finger into one of the mens i the NCM did it really fast and the other man yelled all a round.

But the other man kept hitting the NMC with his fist ( i just learned that word from Fae) the NMC pushed him back with his hand still open then got up really fast. The looked at each other for a while and the other man ran at the NMC again but this time the NMC made his body go into a sirkul and hit the man with his foot on his stummach. the he squeeze thier heads until it poped (Moma Jesseca told me to forget that but i liked it)

the NMC came with us home and told us all not to worry cause now we are the children of Zion (Moma jesseka told me how to spell that)

he smiled at all of us then left.

Wroten by Solid Ronin.

[uc pseudonym]

It's interesting to have the story written by a child, but be careful; it can make things merely unreadable if not handled properly. Other than that, an interesting beginning. I would suggest giving it another edit; I think you'll notice things to fix.

[Solid Ronin]

...Man. I really need to read my stories before posting them!...Thank you Master I believe I fixed all the problems.