hey here's poems ^^ let me know what you think i'll be posting them as much as i can
The murderers heart
a Fateful dark deed
a kind heart turned black
disbelief and doubt scarring
the heart that would end the world
a Prophesied dark deed
peace turned to sorrow
predicted and known
yet it did not stop the abyss from opening
A Bitter dark deed
Sought out yet turncoat
rejected by man , accepted by God
still the heart unsheathed the blade
A Vile dark deed
Here this murderers heart came into light
Doing just as he was told
here the Son of God became betrayed
The Last dark deed
a murderer black that none can compare
God was murdered
,murdered by a friend
well let me know what yall think ^^ hehe i'll post more as it comes
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"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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That's rather... poetic.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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glad you think so ^_^ heh
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Why?
In the intercession
for the souls of our humanity
a God came to man
came to die
all for his created
those that spat and beat him
those that cursed him, mocked him
yet he came
he knew
and he came
the lowliest saw him first
not the kings , the queens;
the poor, the deformed, the desitute
he called them from their abyss
and his friends knew him the best
yet they hurt him the worst
he could have died quick
a rock, a heavy stone, a cliff
could have died so easily
so painless, carefree
but he didn't
he took a cross
nail pierced, humiliated and betrayed
yet he loves us anyway
we are the one's who kill him day to day
we, his murderers, the one he calls "Beloved and friends"
heh this was an inspired poem so i didn't edit but i hope you like the rough work anyway ^^
In the intercession
for the souls of our humanity
a God came to man
came to die
all for his created
those that spat and beat him
those that cursed him, mocked him
yet he came
he knew
and he came
the lowliest saw him first
not the kings , the queens;
the poor, the deformed, the desitute
he called them from their abyss
and his friends knew him the best
yet they hurt him the worst
he could have died quick
a rock, a heavy stone, a cliff
could have died so easily
so painless, carefree
but he didn't
he took a cross
nail pierced, humiliated and betrayed
yet he loves us anyway
we are the one's who kill him day to day
we, his murderers, the one he calls "Beloved and friends"
heh this was an inspired poem so i didn't edit but i hope you like the rough work anyway ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Child
I looked at the child
the one on the corner
holding her mamma's hand
black dirt on her face
rags on her clothes
holding a sign for money
asking for food
I looked at the worn girl
her face gaunt with hunger
and watched, knowing some would give her food
something to fill her tummy
enough so it wouldn't hurt at night
while she lied with her mother close for warmth
The mother looked worse
pale lips, tired eyes
a life taht had seen so many trials
enough to weigh the sturdy rock down
enough to drown them both
yet she held her head high,
she held her little girl's hands
her eyes imploring
shame filled and desperate
I saw her and stopped
my face once turned to scorn
looking at her mother
"How could she let this happen?"
i had muttered so bitterly under my breath
starting to hate her all the more
God answered then, "How could you?"
heh hope you like oh and this isn't from personal experience tho i think we can all relate ^^
I looked at the child
the one on the corner
holding her mamma's hand
black dirt on her face
rags on her clothes
holding a sign for money
asking for food
I looked at the worn girl
her face gaunt with hunger
and watched, knowing some would give her food
something to fill her tummy
enough so it wouldn't hurt at night
while she lied with her mother close for warmth
The mother looked worse
pale lips, tired eyes
a life taht had seen so many trials
enough to weigh the sturdy rock down
enough to drown them both
yet she held her head high,
she held her little girl's hands
her eyes imploring
shame filled and desperate
I saw her and stopped
my face once turned to scorn
looking at her mother
"How could she let this happen?"
i had muttered so bitterly under my breath
starting to hate her all the more
God answered then, "How could you?"
heh hope you like oh and this isn't from personal experience tho i think we can all relate ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Good and good. The second one feels a wee bit more poetic, but I'm not going to put down something with such a strong point to be made.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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heh second one i guess is sadder too ^^; thankyou as always magekind for supporting me ^_^ i really do appreciate the post you give and any advice you might have ^^ *ninja poof out*
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Dancing
With the fast moving wind
on the canvas of the sea
you can see Him dancing
walking down the darkest street
singing to his heart content
feet moving to a new winded beat
dancing to the song of Gold
dancing to the Father's tune
free, arms wide
head tilted back in jubilee
great is the King of Heaven
With the fast moving wind
on the canvas of the sea
you can see Him dancing
walking down the darkest street
singing to his heart content
feet moving to a new winded beat
dancing to the song of Gold
dancing to the Father's tune
free, arms wide
head tilted back in jubilee
great is the King of Heaven
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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The murderer's heart felt like a song for some reason because of the way you capitalized the second word in each stanza.
The second one has a very good message.
Good stuff. Keep it up!
The second one has a very good message.
Good stuff. Keep it up!
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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Very, very good. Good message, enough rhyme and rhythm to draw even myself into reading the whole thing. And short enough I didn't lose interest.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
At-Close Paren-Right inclusive bracket-Tilde. Thanks to CAA mods. Taken from Jaden Mental's sig.
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These are great! I really like "Why?" a lot!!
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
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Ssjjvash - Posts: 1073
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girlninja wrote:hey here's poems ^^ let me know what you think i'll be posting them as much as i can
The murderers heart
a Fateful dark deed
a kind heart turned black
disbelief and doubt scarring
the heart that would end the world
a Prophesied dark deed
peace turned to sorrow
predicted and known
yet it did not stop the abyss from opening
A Bitter dark deed
Sought out yet turncoat
rejected by man , accepted by God
still the heart unsheathed the blade
A Vile dark deed
Here this murderers heart came into light
Doing just as he was told
here the Son of God became betrayed
The Last dark deed
a murderer black that none can compare
God was murdered
,murdered by a friend
well let me know what yall think ^^ hehe i'll post more as it comes
I love, love, love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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zelda - Posts: 237
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ok ...DEFINETLY not like me cuz it RHYMEs >< >< lol but i thought i would try and see if anything intellectual would come out lol hope it amuses you if anything lol
Writing
Why are all the greatest arts
about the suffering of the heart?
about the darkest, blackest deeds
forever wandering the world with dreams
Do these tales of misery and woe
Do they truly tell of man's circumstance
where the world is in such a chance
as to leave the writer's of this world forever writing of man's sorrow
Why do men not write of hope
where the world is born, redone
where no one is left to cope
with the heartache the minstrel strums
So my friends
i ask again
where is the writing of such tradegies end?
Where does the hope regain
or is it merely a dying flame?
heh kinda shaky but not bad for the first time i think ^_^
Writing
Why are all the greatest arts
about the suffering of the heart?
about the darkest, blackest deeds
forever wandering the world with dreams
Do these tales of misery and woe
Do they truly tell of man's circumstance
where the world is in such a chance
as to leave the writer's of this world forever writing of man's sorrow
Why do men not write of hope
where the world is born, redone
where no one is left to cope
with the heartache the minstrel strums
So my friends
i ask again
where is the writing of such tradegies end?
Where does the hope regain
or is it merely a dying flame?
heh kinda shaky but not bad for the first time i think ^_^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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I have tried that, but without the success you have obtained. Good work!girlninja wrote:i thought i would try and see if anything intellectual would come out
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
- Joined: Fri Aug 27, 2004 5:43 am
- Location: Brazil
another one thankyou for all the support ^_^ i'm enjoying posting on here and getting replies
Gold and Blood
Seeing the eagles wings
as it soars above the trees
to Byzanitium it flies
to there it tries to reach the heavens
to the land filled with gold
And as this eagle
this vain and proud stocked beast
flies on the currents winds
to the land of Byzantium it calls
looking with clear and hungry eyes
towards the largest building there
It lands
quite happy
shaking loose it's feathers
and it touches the largest building there
turning the gold to blood
The blood covers the lands
flowing from the river bend
up towards this land of gold
covering the eagles wings
so that it may fly no more
With bloodsoaked wings
the being sees that it can no longer fly
so it instead goes and walks
trying to find a resting place
as it walks, no longer grand
no longer will people stand in awe
over the greatness of his flight
so instead he is forced to walk
with the other creatures of the dark
Yet they smile and laugh
do they not see, this grand bird wonders
that they walk among the dirt?
Yes, an owl replies, we dont' mind
we were here first
heh ok this was one of the first attempts to use a lot of symbolic imagery and some allusions heh if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know but if you think you know what it means please i'd like to hear your answers not for the sake of being proudful or complicated but it would help me to whether i need to make my imagery more clear or what ^_^ Domo ^^
Gold and Blood
Seeing the eagles wings
as it soars above the trees
to Byzanitium it flies
to there it tries to reach the heavens
to the land filled with gold
And as this eagle
this vain and proud stocked beast
flies on the currents winds
to the land of Byzantium it calls
looking with clear and hungry eyes
towards the largest building there
It lands
quite happy
shaking loose it's feathers
and it touches the largest building there
turning the gold to blood
The blood covers the lands
flowing from the river bend
up towards this land of gold
covering the eagles wings
so that it may fly no more
With bloodsoaked wings
the being sees that it can no longer fly
so it instead goes and walks
trying to find a resting place
as it walks, no longer grand
no longer will people stand in awe
over the greatness of his flight
so instead he is forced to walk
with the other creatures of the dark
Yet they smile and laugh
do they not see, this grand bird wonders
that they walk among the dirt?
Yes, an owl replies, we dont' mind
we were here first
heh ok this was one of the first attempts to use a lot of symbolic imagery and some allusions heh if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know but if you think you know what it means please i'd like to hear your answers not for the sake of being proudful or complicated but it would help me to whether i need to make my imagery more clear or what ^_^ Domo ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Willow Tree's Speech
I once talked to a Willow
and it talked back to me
and i wondered at what it said
for it told me
of dreams
of the future
of the past
of the things the trees so often speak of
Once, he said, there once was a tree
that was the greatest of them all
Cut down and stripped bare
the bark torn
the leaves ripped
it stood as a pair of logs
Yet this tree was deemed for greatness
with the great outreaching of it's limbs
it became the resting place of a King
Bloodsoaked and nailed when the King was placed
this tree became his constant friend
he did not abandon him as other's had done
When the mighty SOn of Man
gave his last breath
the tree was there to support the limp limbs
of the Dead Lamb that would come to rise
Thise tree was soon discarded
Blood still fresh on it's skin
Yet he was deemed great
for he held the body of the King
the one that had come to save you humans, the willow added,
the one who would come again
hoep you like ^_^
I once talked to a Willow
and it talked back to me
and i wondered at what it said
for it told me
of dreams
of the future
of the past
of the things the trees so often speak of
Once, he said, there once was a tree
that was the greatest of them all
Cut down and stripped bare
the bark torn
the leaves ripped
it stood as a pair of logs
Yet this tree was deemed for greatness
with the great outreaching of it's limbs
it became the resting place of a King
Bloodsoaked and nailed when the King was placed
this tree became his constant friend
he did not abandon him as other's had done
When the mighty SOn of Man
gave his last breath
the tree was there to support the limp limbs
of the Dead Lamb that would come to rise
Thise tree was soon discarded
Blood still fresh on it's skin
Yet he was deemed great
for he held the body of the King
the one that had come to save you humans, the willow added,
the one who would come again
hoep you like ^_^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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girlninja, in regards to Gold and Blood wrote:if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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Writing was soooo close. Sooooo close! It rhymed, for the most part, and I could almost catch a rhythm in it! Aaagh! It bugs me. I like it, though. Didn't have time to read the others yet. Oh, and yes, getting replies and comments is the funnest thing about it. That's why I don't do my short stories thread every day. It's just so... quiet there.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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Great work, girlninja! I really like Writing. In a way, it did seem to rhyme. Like the vowel sounds of some words.
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
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Ssjjvash - Posts: 1073
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girlninja wrote:another one thankyou for all the support ^_^ i'm enjoying posting on here and getting replies
Gold and Blood
Seeing the eagles wings
as it soars above the trees
to Byzanitium it flies
to there it tries to reach the heavens
to the land filled with gold
And as this eagle
this vain and proud stocked beast
flies on the currents winds
to the land of Byzantium it calls
looking with clear and hungry eyes
towards the largest building there
It lands
quite happy
shaking loose it's feathers
and it touches the largest building there
turning the gold to blood
The blood covers the lands
flowing from the river bend
up towards this land of gold
covering the eagles wings
so that it may fly no more
With bloodsoaked wings
the being sees that it can no longer fly
so it instead goes and walks
trying to find a resting place
as it walks, no longer grand
no longer will people stand in awe
over the greatness of his flight
so instead he is forced to walk
with the other creatures of the dark
Yet they smile and laugh
do they not see, this grand bird wonders
that they walk among the dirt?
Yes, an owl replies, we dont' mind
we were here first
heh ok this was one of the first attempts to use a lot of symbolic imagery and some allusions heh if an explanation is needed of the poem please let me know but if you think you know what it means please i'd like to hear your answers not for the sake of being proudful or complicated but it would help me to whether i need to make my imagery more clear or what ^_^ Domo ^^
OK Anne Mae asked for a explanation lol and i don't blame ya lol
ok little history allusion here...Byzantium was a very very wealthy city in acient times...i believe close to Rome...the eagle is symbolic of a proud person...hence looking at the gold and wishing to be on the tallest building...but because there is such pride the eagle turns everything it touches to blood *signifying the pride before the fall* well the blood is the fall essentially...now it is left to walk with the other creatures other "mortals" as it were...now they walk in dirt but they are happy...signifying how those who stay in humility never worry about prideful things and are content where they are ^_^
hopefully that helped you a bit ^^ if you need any other's let me know
sorry i know these were deep....reading too much T.S. Eliot lately lol
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Magekind wrote:Writing was soooo close. Sooooo close! It rhymed, for the most part, and I could almost catch a rhythm in it! Aaagh! It bugs me. I like it, though. Didn't have time to read the others yet. Oh, and yes, getting replies and comments is the funnest thing about it. That's why I don't do my short stories thread every day. It's just so... quiet there.
lol glad you appreciated it magekind lol figured you would
LOL and yes i left the allusion of rhythm JUST to torture you MWAHAHHAHAHA *Wink lol *ninja poof out* "If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Thanks for the explanation (I tend to read too much into things, so I am glad to know what you intended)! Good work.
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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hope you like ^_^ deep but not too symbolic this time ^^
In the dark room
here i sit
my anger seething
like a dragon on my shoulder
it whispers dark thoughts
into my mind
feeling the pain
of someone else's hurt
The scales come over me
writhing up my arm
like an all consuming waterfall
dripping fire from my soul
I scream
the hurt of the person's knife
piercing and ripping
feeling it tear into my flesh
Free flowing blood
not my own
quenching the raging inferno
feeling peace once more
The dragon drowns
purged within the blood
blood filling everything, an inquisition
bitterness flees before me
heh hope you like ^^ if it's too deep which i did unintentionally lol it's about how bitterness consumes but is driven out with the Blood of Jesus takes hold and you let him ^^ thanks guys
In the dark room
here i sit
my anger seething
like a dragon on my shoulder
it whispers dark thoughts
into my mind
feeling the pain
of someone else's hurt
The scales come over me
writhing up my arm
like an all consuming waterfall
dripping fire from my soul
I scream
the hurt of the person's knife
piercing and ripping
feeling it tear into my flesh
Free flowing blood
not my own
quenching the raging inferno
feeling peace once more
The dragon drowns
purged within the blood
blood filling everything, an inquisition
bitterness flees before me
heh hope you like ^^ if it's too deep which i did unintentionally lol it's about how bitterness consumes but is driven out with the Blood of Jesus takes hold and you let him ^^ thanks guys
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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Uhhh.... hmmm..... the visuals came out a wee bit different than that when I just ran them through my little fantasy-generator toy I have installed in my head. Just a wee bit different.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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To me, talking about blood cleansing things has always seemed a little weird. Having blood all over you would be discusting!
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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lol well ya but i'm using the image of Jesus's blood washing over not human blood...the imaging is about bitterness *satan being the dragon/bitterness* i don't know lol my imaging is coming out wierd and not how i want it hopefully it will get better soon
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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two more ^_^
Distance
As I look out my window
the window pane
shielding my vision
i see the morning dawn rising
like a great Trumpet
heralding forth the day.
The wind blows it's sweet whispers
calling forth the clouds and dew
telling them to "come, COme!"
there is much work for them.
And i see past the long horizon
in the distance
like an ominous being, a lion ready to devour
black clouds and a waterfall of rain
looms in the distance
Bird of prey flee before it
as it cracks and rattles the bones
It announces it's arrival
like the beating of a drum.
Love
How long, my love
must i wait to feel
your sweet lips upon my cheek?
THe gentle touch of you hand upon my neck
Must i wait to hear you voice
the one that makes me laugh
and dries my tears
the voice that makes me fall in love
like a nightingale,
it's sweet melodious sound rings without
Love is patient and Kind
it is not jealous nor does it quarrel
it's what holds you in a tight embrace
when the world around you crashes asunder
when all is lost in deep commotion
Love is there with all it's splender
unconditional like a sweet bride
Can i wait any longer before my heart breaks?
When will our love come into being?
Or is it doomed to live in such a state of ectasy
that it can never come to pass?
heh hope you guys like ^_^
the first one was on a whim of inspiration and the second one was dedicated to those who understand missing a loved one *in the sense of boyfriend/husband/girlfriend/wife type of relationship ^_^ hope some of you could relate ^^
Distance
As I look out my window
the window pane
shielding my vision
i see the morning dawn rising
like a great Trumpet
heralding forth the day.
The wind blows it's sweet whispers
calling forth the clouds and dew
telling them to "come, COme!"
there is much work for them.
And i see past the long horizon
in the distance
like an ominous being, a lion ready to devour
black clouds and a waterfall of rain
looms in the distance
Bird of prey flee before it
as it cracks and rattles the bones
It announces it's arrival
like the beating of a drum.
Love
How long, my love
must i wait to feel
your sweet lips upon my cheek?
THe gentle touch of you hand upon my neck
Must i wait to hear you voice
the one that makes me laugh
and dries my tears
the voice that makes me fall in love
like a nightingale,
it's sweet melodious sound rings without
Love is patient and Kind
it is not jealous nor does it quarrel
it's what holds you in a tight embrace
when the world around you crashes asunder
when all is lost in deep commotion
Love is there with all it's splender
unconditional like a sweet bride
Can i wait any longer before my heart breaks?
When will our love come into being?
Or is it doomed to live in such a state of ectasy
that it can never come to pass?
heh hope you guys like ^_^
the first one was on a whim of inspiration and the second one was dedicated to those who understand missing a loved one *in the sense of boyfriend/husband/girlfriend/wife type of relationship ^_^ hope some of you could relate ^^
"If not now then when? If not me then who?-anonymous
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
and of course now i must instill the Dancing BANANA'S!
WHY AM I CRYING IN FRENCH-Vash the Stampede
ORORORORORO!-Himura Kenshin
"It is not weak to value human life!"-Raiden, Mortal Combat II
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
*ADOPTED BY* ..yea i know scary I got a adopted ~_^
Nami
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girlninja - Posts: 388
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I can imagine relating, does that count? lol, I'm playin'. ^^ Good job on all of them.
The poem on bitterness is great. I know that bitterness eats away at your insides. *shiver* Ah, but when you forgive...!
The poem on bitterness is great. I know that bitterness eats away at your insides. *shiver* Ah, but when you forgive...!
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!
Rudyard Kipling
Satan, bite the dust!
"You are not who your mistakes say you are; you are not the sum of your failures!"---Rev. Billy Miller
Proverbs 18:24
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Ssjjvash - Posts: 1073
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Hmmm. Interesting.
[SIZE="4"][color="DarkSlateBlue"]God has called me to mission work in Paraguay and Brazil. I may return to CAA someday. God bless all of you![/color][/SIZE]
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:
“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Anna Mae - Posts: 1663
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Both very good pieces, both with your distinctive style.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
At-Close Paren-Right inclusive bracket-Tilde. Thanks to CAA mods. Taken from Jaden Mental's sig.
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