just a poem i came up with on the spot just now. ^^ hope ya guys like it...
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you love me and won't let me be
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i was gone
but not for long
i was dying
but you kept trying
you wouldn't let me fall
you wouldn't let me die
you wouldn't let me just give it all away
i felt weak
and you were meak
i was down
so you made a frown
you wouldn't let me cry
you wouldn't let me go
you wouldn't let me throw it all away
why wouldn't you let me do my own thing?
i gave you so much pain
i felt like all i did was in vain
why wouldn't you let me do my own thing?
it's because you loved me
just as you do now
just as you always will
you want to protect me and keep me safe
for as long as you can
you wouldn't let me go
you wouln't let me cry
you'll just love me...
even after i die
on the spot poem...
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on the spot poem...
[color="DarkOrange"]"The way I see it, every life is a pile of good things and bad things... hey... the good things don't always soften the bad things; but vice-versa the bad things don't necessarily spoil the good things and make them unimportant." -11th Doctor
"The advice I like to give young artists, or really anybody who’ll listen to me, is not to wait around for inspiration. Inspiration is for amateurs; the rest of us just show up and get to work. If you wait around for the clouds to part and a bolt of lightning to strike you in the brain, you are not going to make an awful lot of work. All the best ideas come out of the process; they come out of the work itself. Things occur to you. If you’re sitting around trying to dream up a great art idea, you can sit there a long time before anything happens. But if you just get to work, something will occur to you and something else will occur to you and something else that you reject will push you in another direction. Inspiration is absolutely unnecessary and somehow deceptive. You feel like you need this great idea before you can get down to work, and I find that’s almost never the case." - Chuck Close[/color]
"The advice I like to give young artists, or really anybody who’ll listen to me, is not to wait around for inspiration. Inspiration is for amateurs; the rest of us just show up and get to work. If you wait around for the clouds to part and a bolt of lightning to strike you in the brain, you are not going to make an awful lot of work. All the best ideas come out of the process; they come out of the work itself. Things occur to you. If you’re sitting around trying to dream up a great art idea, you can sit there a long time before anything happens. But if you just get to work, something will occur to you and something else will occur to you and something else that you reject will push you in another direction. Inspiration is absolutely unnecessary and somehow deceptive. You feel like you need this great idea before you can get down to work, and I find that’s almost never the case." - Chuck Close[/color]
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c.t.,girl - Posts: 1428
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How inspiring. Even in our darkest hours, people we care about will come to our aid. Impressive rhyming.
I am unique, just like everyone else.
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SereneDolphin - Posts: 79
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I liked this one, c.t.. ^_________^ Again, I must make the disclaimer, I am not a poet; thus, I cannot comment on it as poetry only on the fact I enjoyed reading it. ~_^
[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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lol i can't rhyme either...i don't do the structure...ever...but...i guess i sorta did structure...i sorta do my own thing with poetry...for me...it's like...something that I do. only cuz you can't copy it like you can art...to me...poetry is something that just flows and is at the moment...cuz if you don't write it down at that moment you won't feel the same about it when you write it later....so...most of my poems are on the spot. ^^
[color="DarkOrange"]"The way I see it, every life is a pile of good things and bad things... hey... the good things don't always soften the bad things; but vice-versa the bad things don't necessarily spoil the good things and make them unimportant." -11th Doctor
"The advice I like to give young artists, or really anybody who’ll listen to me, is not to wait around for inspiration. Inspiration is for amateurs; the rest of us just show up and get to work. If you wait around for the clouds to part and a bolt of lightning to strike you in the brain, you are not going to make an awful lot of work. All the best ideas come out of the process; they come out of the work itself. Things occur to you. If you’re sitting around trying to dream up a great art idea, you can sit there a long time before anything happens. But if you just get to work, something will occur to you and something else will occur to you and something else that you reject will push you in another direction. Inspiration is absolutely unnecessary and somehow deceptive. You feel like you need this great idea before you can get down to work, and I find that’s almost never the case." - Chuck Close[/color]
"The advice I like to give young artists, or really anybody who’ll listen to me, is not to wait around for inspiration. Inspiration is for amateurs; the rest of us just show up and get to work. If you wait around for the clouds to part and a bolt of lightning to strike you in the brain, you are not going to make an awful lot of work. All the best ideas come out of the process; they come out of the work itself. Things occur to you. If you’re sitting around trying to dream up a great art idea, you can sit there a long time before anything happens. But if you just get to work, something will occur to you and something else will occur to you and something else that you reject will push you in another direction. Inspiration is absolutely unnecessary and somehow deceptive. You feel like you need this great idea before you can get down to work, and I find that’s almost never the case." - Chuck Close[/color]
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c.t.,girl - Posts: 1428
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well, thats even better! i prefer poems that don't have the rhyme schemes, and "feet" and that sort of stuff; it just seems to make 'em meaningless. i wrote one about Jesus being my celebrity, and ironically, it was when i was between sleep and awake, and the radio was playing "Celebrity" from nsync at the time. i'm way over them now, but that's how i got it! *blushes*
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Nothing to be embarrassed about, LostChild. We've all been there.
To me, poetry's about feelings. Which is why if you get inspired all of a sudden, it's best to write it down right then and there, so you can put as much feeling into it. The fact that you made it rhyme made it all the more impressive, c.t.
Wait, I'm getting an inspiration right now. . .I think I'm about to post something in a few. Anyway, hope you write more poetry, c.t., you have obvious talent.
To me, poetry's about feelings. Which is why if you get inspired all of a sudden, it's best to write it down right then and there, so you can put as much feeling into it. The fact that you made it rhyme made it all the more impressive, c.t.
Wait, I'm getting an inspiration right now. . .I think I'm about to post something in a few. Anyway, hope you write more poetry, c.t., you have obvious talent.
I am unique, just like everyone else.
[size=84]"Fate is like a strange, unpopular restaurant, filled with odd waitors who bring you things you never asked for and don't always like"- Lemony Snicket[/SIZE]
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SereneDolphin - Posts: 79
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SereneDolphin wrote:To me, poetry's about feelings. Which is why if you get inspired all of a sudden, it's best to write it down right then and there, so you can put as much feeling into it. The fact that you made it rhyme made it all the more impressive, c.t.
Wait, I'm getting an inspiration right now. . .I think I'm about to post something in a few. Anyway, hope you write more poetry, c.t., you have obvious talent.
yup, and you're good at it c.t. i'll second that, keep it up!
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