Poem: Break *read commentary
PostPosted: Sun Apr 09, 2006 8:45 pm
This is a poem I wrote, please...if you read the poem read the commentary as well. its very important for understanding my point in writing such a poem. Also, a brief warning, this poem does mention suicide in a way, its not a bad poem though so just read the commentary and you'll go "ooooo!" so..yeah. Read, enjoy, comment. thanks! ^_^
Haven’t any of you felt this little voice in your head? Saying words like this poem to you over and over....
"Its ok to hide everything, its ok if no one knows. They don't want to know! It'll only hurt them....by hurting yourself in your room where no one can see you then you’re saving them from feeling bad. You’re saving them from heartache."
That little voice that justifies it all....justifies drugs or sex or cutting or whatever anyone may use to calm their heartache and pain while still keeping it locked up inside....until the justification doesn't matter anymore and you realize that each of those things are only temporary...the only permanent solution is suicide.
Things in life that are substitutes for pain never get better....cutting only gets worse, sex only gets more addictive and less satisfying (speaking about using sex as a substitute...not like when your in love), and drugs get worse, cause you to do or think in ways you never thought you would and some will eventually end in death.
But do you really want to die?! Don't listen to those stupid voices! It’s ok to lean on other people, its ok to share your pain! It’s ok to feel pain in the first place! but its not ok to listen to that poem....to those voices. Sure they sound good....you can't deny that sometimes they make sense, but you have to realize that they're completely bogus.
Live on, share your pain, and slowly things can get better.
Comments?
Break
Copywrite© Shaina W.
03-25-06
Bury your emotion,
Deep within your heart.
Don't let anyone see you!
Hold back your tears, don't start.
Think of the ones your emotions will scar,
Let yourself feel pain....
Away from their understanding,
Away from their eyes, remain.
Hold on to your imaginary reality,
Don't even try to confide!
Just flash your fake smile....
Keep your tears locked inside.
Don't think to be selfish,
Telling them will only cause heartache.
Hang on to your grief,
Keep it within, don't break.
When you can take it no more,
Just wrap the rope around your neck.
Take a deep breath....
It'll all be over in a sec.
End your sweet misery,
Hold on to your imaginary reality.
End it all with a short drop; fatality.
No more fake smile...
No more hiding your heartache....
No more holding back your tears...
You can finally release.......BREAK!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Copywrite© Shaina W.
03-25-06
Bury your emotion,
Deep within your heart.
Don't let anyone see you!
Hold back your tears, don't start.
Think of the ones your emotions will scar,
Let yourself feel pain....
Away from their understanding,
Away from their eyes, remain.
Hold on to your imaginary reality,
Don't even try to confide!
Just flash your fake smile....
Keep your tears locked inside.
Don't think to be selfish,
Telling them will only cause heartache.
Hang on to your grief,
Keep it within, don't break.
When you can take it no more,
Just wrap the rope around your neck.
Take a deep breath....
It'll all be over in a sec.
End your sweet misery,
Hold on to your imaginary reality.
End it all with a short drop; fatality.
No more fake smile...
No more hiding your heartache....
No more holding back your tears...
You can finally release.......BREAK!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Haven’t any of you felt this little voice in your head? Saying words like this poem to you over and over....
"Its ok to hide everything, its ok if no one knows. They don't want to know! It'll only hurt them....by hurting yourself in your room where no one can see you then you’re saving them from feeling bad. You’re saving them from heartache."
That little voice that justifies it all....justifies drugs or sex or cutting or whatever anyone may use to calm their heartache and pain while still keeping it locked up inside....until the justification doesn't matter anymore and you realize that each of those things are only temporary...the only permanent solution is suicide.
Things in life that are substitutes for pain never get better....cutting only gets worse, sex only gets more addictive and less satisfying (speaking about using sex as a substitute...not like when your in love), and drugs get worse, cause you to do or think in ways you never thought you would and some will eventually end in death.
But do you really want to die?! Don't listen to those stupid voices! It’s ok to lean on other people, its ok to share your pain! It’s ok to feel pain in the first place! but its not ok to listen to that poem....to those voices. Sure they sound good....you can't deny that sometimes they make sense, but you have to realize that they're completely bogus.
Live on, share your pain, and slowly things can get better.
Comments?