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Birdcatcher's Hymn

PostPosted: Mon Sep 30, 2013 9:12 pm
by Zarn Ishtare
someone must pluck the bird
from amidst the pricking thorns.
who will bind the wounds
from one saved from the rosebush?
better I a servant in my masters garden
then amongst the satraps of the perfumed court.

let me stand in the Unsullied presence
as one who has wept with the broken
let me live in the hollow of His hand
and bandage the fallen birds
consider me a pauper but bless me with mercy
lest I too with the roses, fade and dim
unburnished, unblemished by passing years
let my love speak for me, make mute my fears.

Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

PostPosted: Tue Oct 01, 2013 1:54 pm
by Lynna
I like it :) It's really beautiful, and very hymn-like. I think it might just be my favourite of yours so far. I'm guessing that the capitalizations (Or lack of them) are intentional?

Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

PostPosted: Tue Oct 01, 2013 6:35 pm
by Zarn Ishtare
yep.

Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

PostPosted: Tue Oct 01, 2013 8:22 pm
by ClaecElric4God
Nice. It almost sounds like something I wrote once, especially those first few lines about binding wounds.
"as one who has wept with the broken" might be my favorite line here. Definitely stands out to me.

Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

PostPosted: Tue Oct 01, 2013 9:51 pm
by PandaPop
Wow yeah this is hauntingly beautiful, I like it a lot.