heres piece of the first chapter.

[kaibrightwing]

Chapter 1
Rainfin 21, 106 AR. The year of the starting.
“My name is Kai Brightwing I'm the Archmage and headmaster of school of magic in the city of Shinhajime or more commonly called by the locals the city, as the (city of New beginnings). I have lived for some two hundreds years and seen many thing in that time like the rise and fall of the great kingdom of Sandtree and the birth of my friend Shinfin the Gold Dragon of Starfekey mountains and many other thing in this and other worlds. I built a school of magic to teach magic to anyone you wanted to learn, But you are not here to listen to my life story of an old man, are you?”
In the 106AR (after renewal) in the newly discovered ancient city of Luna a discover of a temple to the goddess of night Luna was found. A group of explores entered the temple and explored the temple, After five hours there was no sign of them.
“Sir, its been over five hours should we send in another group to see what is happening? As a middle-age man walk up he was dress in robes and carrying a staff with a dragon finguer on it.
Nathan Davion turned. “Yes it has been some time Peter forum a group to go in.” Peter nodded his head than turned and walked away.
When the other group was about to go in the sound of echoing foot steps on the stone floor was coming down the dark hall as the people looked in a dark figure came out of the ruins it was a figure dress in a black hooded robe with a black staff with a silver figure of a snake with two bodies coiled down around the staff. He walked out of the enterance and stop he looked around and turned to Nathan removed his hood and to their surprise everyone saw his face was rotted away and his left eye was miss and the smell of decomposing radiated out from him. The people backed away from him and Nathan found himself reaching for his sword and the feeling ill. He look at the group that was about to enter the ruins and said
In a dark deep accent "So who was the one who wake me from my sleep?" as he turned to Nathan.
Nathan looked surprised.
“What do you mean?”
The figure turned looking at the people than shapely turned to Nathan and said “what year is it?” Looking at Nathan.
Nathan swallowed and said ”it is the year of starting.” The man looked at him with his one eye and laughed “So it has been one hundred years since I was put to rest and they forgot that I was here. Well than I have to go visit my old friends but first I most thank you for your help a small gift for you and your friend.” Suddenly sound of mouring and steps started echoing from the dark hall. Nathan draw his sword and turned to the hall than suddenly a cold hand grabbed his back of his neck and he screamed as Peter turned and saw the dark figure with his glowing hand on his neck and Nathan aging fast. Peter quick cast a spell. The dark figure was laughing at the moment the sound of cracking and a sudden searing pain came over the man he dropped Nathan and turned and pointed to peter. ’ you, will pay for that!’ as he said that undead started to pour out of the hall.

[uc pseudonym]

Interesting and readable, despite language issues. I'll read whatever else you put out. I don't mean to be condescending, but would you appreciate someone editing things? I could do it, if you pm me with them.

[kaibrightwing]

edit what i have to ask, and what language issues?
Just wondering.

[uc pseudonym]

Edit the story, I meant to say. Perhaps I'm confusing you with someone else. I know there's someone around here who hasn't had to use English enough to have the language mastered. Am I thinking of the wrong person?