Kokoro's Prose Editing Workshop

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Kokoro's Prose Editing Workshop

Postby Debitt » Wed Feb 25, 2004 7:55 pm

o_o; Urk...I hope this belongs here. (I couldn't think of another place to put this, besides maybe the Tutorials.)

Anyways, welcome to Kokoro's Prose Editing Workshop, where my red pen and my writer's eye are here to help you with your writing~

1. I only do prose, no poetry (sorry, but honestly, I am NO POET).
2. Please realize longer stories will...well, take longer. I have a rather short attention span, so don't expect every editing job I do to be done within a couple hours.
3. If you want me to edit one of your pieces, post the link to your topic in this thread. Again, due to my short attention span, if you want me to edit a story that's in a long thread (5 pages or more) please PM it to me. I don't like digging through a thread looking for things.
4. All my edits are done from a non-biased stand point, so don't take anything as a personal attack. I know I shouldn't have much of a problem here, though! (unlike on Gaia online. --;; )
5. I'll have three (count em', three) editing spots open at a time. If you come here and see all three spots are filled, please try not to ask me to critique your work until I'm done with at least one of my other edits.

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Postby Debitt » Sun Feb 29, 2004 9:53 am

Just giving this a quick bump. ^_^
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Feb 29, 2004 11:48 am

This is great, Kokoro. You go to Gaia, too? I'm glad there's an editor here. ^_^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby ShiroiHikari » Sun Feb 29, 2004 2:34 pm

<_< If I can ever get my story back together and organized again, I might submit some of it...but you'd probably have an an..anu..anudfs...your head would explode. o_O
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Postby Debitt » Sun Feb 29, 2004 3:07 pm

ShiroiHikari wrote:your head would explode. o_O

^_^ Oh, it does that all the time anyways.
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Postby Debitt » Mon Mar 08, 2004 6:41 pm

*bump* :sweat:
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Postby Aka-chan » Fri Apr 09, 2004 1:21 am

Found a short story of mine!
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