My currently unamed story (prologue)

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My currently unamed story (prologue)

Postby *Hope* » Thu Jul 17, 2003 7:17 pm

Hope u likey. I'll post more when i get more written and typed!
Prologue
Three year old Isaac sat, with his thumb in his mouth, on the edge of his bed. He rocked back and forth a little and then started to bounce. After he got bored of that the slid off the bed and crawled over to a toy horse on the floor. His mother found him playing on the floor making noises as he crashed two horses into each other. “Isaac, you know what your father said. You have to be careful with your toys.â€
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Postby uc pseudonym » Fri Jul 18, 2003 1:25 pm

Not at all badly written. As the story goes further we'll see if it's my type.
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Postby Technomancer » Fri Jul 18, 2003 1:33 pm

Not bad. Better paragraphing would be good.
The scientific method," Thomas Henry Huxley once wrote, "is nothing but the normal working of the human mind." That is to say, when the mind is working; that is to say further, when it is engaged in corrrecting its mistakes. Taking this point of view, we may conclude that science is not physics, biology, or chemistry—is not even a "subject"—but a moral imperative drawn from a larger narrative whose purpose is to give perspective, balance, and humility to learning.

Neil Postman
(The End of Education)

Anti-intellectualism has been a constant thread winding its way through our political and cultural life, nurtured by the false notion that democracy means that my ignorance is just as good as your knowledge

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Postby majanthehun » Sat Jul 19, 2003 8:04 am

good so far... now to read more... wait im late for work. later ill read more. gota go now... real fast. bye
Lord, I don't know where this is going,
Or how this all works out
Lead me to peace that is past understanding
A peace beyond all doubt

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Postby Rev. Doc » Sat Jul 19, 2003 5:31 pm

Technomancer wrote:Not bad. Better paragraphing would be good.


I don't think the board allows for paragraphing. The story I'm putting up right now lost all of it's paragraphing once I submitted it.
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Postby uc pseudonym » Sat Jul 19, 2003 5:38 pm

You have to reformat to get the story to work normally. I seperate my paragraphs by a blank line (and page breaks by three). You're correct in that you can't really tab it forward, but splitting it like this does help readability.
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