The Moon

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The Moon

Postby GhostontheNet » Fri Apr 17, 2009 2:03 am

The Moon

(Dedicated to Alphonse Mucha)

There she waits, seated in the night sky
Illuminating the paths of all and sundry
And though she shines her light for all to see
Yet still she is renowned for her modesty

Covering the land in pale moonlight
Where indeed is the man who cannot but admire her flight?
Veiled with darkness as she waxes and wanes
Yet still we shall all see her again

Ageless comfort to those in love, and those who are lonely
All nations and every generation admire your eternal beauty
O' Moon, forever so distant, and yet so near
Whenever thy countenance shines upon me
I know there is nothing left to fear

But oh, what terrors fill my heart
When shadows fill your face
Visions of horror fill my mind
And I fear that I too have fallen from grace

Yes, every woman has a dark side I know
But please remember after hiding again to grow
And though great distance separates my gentle caress upon your face
Someday I hope to visit you in outer space
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Postby Esoteric » Fri Apr 17, 2009 3:01 pm

A most unusual dedication (although one I highly approve of).

I especially liked the second and fourth stanzas.

I'm not super familiar with rhyme forms. Tell me, is there a reason you change the rhyme pattern halfway through, or is it just free form?
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Postby GhostontheNet » Fri Apr 17, 2009 4:00 pm

Esoteric (post: 1305513) wrote:A most unusual dedication (although one I highly approve of).

I especially liked the second and fourth stanzas.

I'm not super familiar with rhyme forms. Tell me, is there a reason you change the rhyme pattern halfway through, or is it just free form?
Thank you! The reason for the dedication is that the inspiration for this poem was Alphonse Mucha's "The Moon", so it was fitting to give credit where credit is due. As for the rhyme scheme, it's mostly not so much a deliberate intention as up until recently, I have not written poetry in a decade, and I just wanted to go for a particular kind of feeling because I have no idea what I'm doing, and have to rely on intuition. I dunno, maybe the reason I changed the rhyme scheme halfway through is because dissonance and disharmony enter the picture with the encroaching shadows upon the moon, and so you can no longer presume upon straightforward harmony. It's like music really, a harmony leads to a dissonance that resolves itself in a harmony.
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