Infosaturation

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Infosaturation

Postby GhostontheNet » Fri Apr 17, 2009 10:27 pm

blinded by video screen only two minutes not evil vampires but bad directors drain me now no sight to see bad cuts blinding me and then all words and images agony retreat to dark room of shadow infosaturation blackout play music of soft streams even in black room media effect me no asylum no sanity only quivering eyestrain agony and everyone demand writing but can barely see half rejuvenation return to me play song with more energy Alien Sex Fiend on the radio singing about information overload ting ting ting ting listen to the mad martian sing shadows for eyes antennas for ears and global village is nothing but thievery write content with muddled mind and sour patch candy so nice teacher give grade me and much too Skinny Puppy is insanity but little now again is good for me
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Sun Apr 19, 2009 11:23 am

GhostontheNet (post: 1305619) wrote:blinded by video screen only two minutes not evil vampires but bad directors drain me now no sight to see bad cuts blinding me and then all words and images agony retreat to dark room of shadow infosaturation blackout play music of soft streams even in black room media effect me no asylum no sanity only quivering eyestrain agony and everyone demand writing but can barely see half rejuvenation return to me play song with more energy Alien Sex Fiend on the radio singing about information overload ting ting ting ting listen to the mad martian sing shadows for eyes antennas for ears and global village is nothing but thievery write content with muddled mind and sour patch candy so nice teacher give grade me and much too Skinny Puppy is insanity but little now again is good for me




It would be an excellent poem but for its formatting. Fix the format=fixes the problem.


Of course

I like to

write my poetry like

this



so perhaps I am not the fittest judge for formatting.
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby ich1990 » Sun Apr 19, 2009 8:42 pm

Actually I think the format is supposed to be all jumbled together. The wall of text adds to the feeling of being saturated with information.
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Postby GhostontheNet » Mon Apr 20, 2009 3:00 pm

ich1990 (post: 1305925) wrote:Actually I think the format is supposed to be all jumbled together. The wall of text adds to the feeling of being saturated with information.
Right on, Ich1990, that's exactly what I meant. While I generally write poetry that's more gentle on the eyes, that didn't seem fitting when the media had me half-blind and severely disoriented.
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Postby Midori » Mon Apr 20, 2009 4:19 pm

I think it is very effective and communicative. Good Job, have a cookie!
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Postby GhostontheNet » Wed Apr 22, 2009 9:55 pm

Midori (post: 1306064) wrote:I think it is very effective and communicative. Good Job, have a cookie!
Thank you, it's a delicious oatmeal raisin cookie with a very sweet tang.
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