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Postby uc pseudonym » Thu Apr 01, 2004 3:55 pm

Well, this portion was no surprise, but I'm glad to see it anyway. Knowing your writing, I think I will find the fighting sequences most enjoyable. While I am waiting for them, do not think for a moment that I in any way wish to rush you or force conflicts before their time.
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Postby Omega Amen » Thu Apr 01, 2004 4:09 pm

Ah, I see my character has a very interesting group to work with.... It should be entertaining.

I am particularly curious about the character relationships you are establishing....

Keep up the good work.
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Postby blueraven » Thu Apr 01, 2004 5:47 pm

I rarely comment on other's writings but I have been reading though and waiting for the next bit. And now that the next bit has been posted I think I'll just have to sit back and once again wait for the next bit :thumb: I am enjoying this very much.
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Postby kirakira » Thu Apr 01, 2004 6:07 pm

*clapclapclap* Post more! ^^ This is fun to read! :)
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Postby Locke » Thu Apr 01, 2004 6:18 pm

nice work dude!

and i like the diologe( cant spell) between me and omega :lol:
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Postby Solid Ronin » Sat Apr 03, 2004 9:02 am

YAYZ people are enjoying my writing!!!

uc pseudonym wrote:Well, this portion was no surprise, but I'm glad to see it anyway. Knowing your writing, I think I will find the fighting sequences most enjoyable. While I am waiting for them, do not think for a moment that I in any way wish to rush you or force conflicts before their time.


To tell the truth, I've added more fighting. And am happy you find entertainment in my fight sences ,Master. Anywho the next part will be the longest in the first "arc" and am hoping it will entertain all.
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Postby Da Rabid Duckie » Sun Apr 04, 2004 8:12 pm

An interesting read so far.... but I think everyone saw this coming: I think it needs more explosions :P
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Postby Solid Ronin » Mon Apr 05, 2004 11:23 am

No explosions..............*plans for one million explosions at once*
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Postby kirakira » Mon Apr 05, 2004 7:06 pm

*grows excited and shifts to the edge of her seat*
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Postby Locke » Mon Apr 05, 2004 9:24 pm

*see kirakira on the edge of her seat*

*does the same*

when in rome...
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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue Apr 06, 2004 11:54 am

YAYZ new reader.......more is begin writen and could be done next Tuesday at best
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Postby Seiya » Tue Apr 13, 2004 4:47 pm

I'm confused.
Where is the story? :eh:
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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue Apr 13, 2004 5:05 pm

Seiya wrote:I'm confused.
Where is the story? :eh:



You are insluting me? or are you truly asking? I'll take it your asking look in the first page.
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Postby Spirit_Wolf8356 » Mon Apr 19, 2004 7:34 am

Cool! This is a fun story! *follows Kira's and Locke's example* Can't wait for more, Ronin!


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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue Apr 27, 2004 4:54 pm

Its going to take me awhile to write the next part so to hold ya'll over Im going to post the detials of the World of C.A.A. Island

Food: The Island of C.A.A. has many resturants but none as popular as "Noddels N' Burgers" Which is a fast food chain owned by Cephas (Ingemar) which serves Japanese soups And all American burgers.

Entertainment: Arcadas Unitum is the most played MMORPG on the island which was created by San of the C.A.A. army.

Bishoujo and BISHIES! magazines are publications (Non- Hentai)that feature pictures of male and female character of Bishounen and Bishoujo anime.
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Postby Locke » Tue Apr 27, 2004 4:58 pm

an update!!

*stares in wonder*
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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue May 04, 2004 5:05 pm

Oh God! this is taking me awhile im afraid.....Im going to split the third chapter into....many Chapters...in this case the third part should be out neek week hopefully (Im so sorry its taking soo long but hopefully you , the readers, shall find it worth the wait...so sorry)
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Postby Anison Twilight » Tue May 04, 2004 5:37 pm

I like it I think it's pretty creative. Good job.
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Postby Solid Ronin » Sat May 08, 2004 8:39 am

Trolls : Trolls are regular human that are banished from thier home for whatever reasons. Although some "troll" just seek another home many have started a kingdom of thier own and often attack other kingdoms. The Island of The C.A.A. has been thier prime target for quite some time.
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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue May 11, 2004 4:33 pm

!WARNING!
This story contians violence and some harsh lanuage





Jet: Are we getting paid for this?

San: If we weren’t you we’d be homeless.

Jet: True.

San and Jet continued to make for Honshu Fort. Honshu village is behind them as they walk a small path in the forest. Around them was the most beautiful forest one could ever see and in their eyes they hear the Honshu River.

San: And you know for a guy who likes fighting as much as you do you sure do complain a lot…Your getting paid to fight, have you ever thought about it that way?

Jet: No… No I haven’t…..

Jet smiled which was a rare sight.

Jet: Wow! I love my Job.

San: Kinda disturbing when you really think about it.

Jet: Want me to complain about it?

San: Please don’t.

San hated complaining.

Jet: That’s what I thought…How far until we reach the fort? Seems we’ve been walking forever.

Jet hated walking when he didn’t want to.

Jet: We’ve walked there over a hundred times, yet you still ask that question... Listen…

They remained silent for a small while and they heard battle cries up ahead. They started running toward the fortress and within minuets they came to the gate of the castle. They entered the fort where they were told by a soldier that Captain Philo was expecting them on the roof. They went above to the roof, it spanned nearly half a mile and was about a hundred paces wide with walls on the side they came up to the waist, they started to walk on the right was the shore where trolls were massing.

The trolls did nothing but shoot arrows into the air hoping to hit an enemy soldier. While they walked, arrows smashing into the roof, they saw an injured soldier sitting by the left wall leaning against it he was begin treated by another, both were wearing the C.A.A. uniform both were armed with the katana.

Jet: Michael?

The wounded soldier looked at Jet.

Michael: Where have you been!?

Jet: Everywhere ‘cept there. Where’s your bro Zip?

Michael: At Fort Kyushu kicking himself for missing the action.

San turned to Michael’s helper.

San: Volt? Why are you here?

Volt finished bandaging Michael’s shoulder.

Volt: heh…Actually I took Zip plAA!

An arrow impaled Volt in the right side of his throat.

All three flinched back.

San and Michael: Ahh!

Jet: OH SNAP!

Volt’s body hit the ground sideways, blood gushing from the wound. San knelt to the ground to help him but all knew he was dead. Two soldiers came with a stretcher and lifted Volt on to it. San tipped his head over the wall to see what was going on…He saw a troll wizard preparing a spell on the side of the wall. A circle of green light appeared where the wizard was San judged the where the light was at and turned back to Jet.

San: We need to get to the keep!

Jet: The hell why?

A soldier came up to Jet.

Jet: Blaze? What do you want?

Blaze: Lieutenant Gonzales, Captain Philo orders you to go Honshu Village to…

Jet: Tell him to do it his dam self!

Blaze: He’s up ahead tell him yourself

San and Jet ran toward Captain Philo. Jet told him about the Troll wizard then asked.

Jet: Sir? Why am I ordered to Honshu village?

Philo: A team of trolls have been spotted destroying the town and we believe their destination is Tokyo Castle.

Tokyo castle is where the Queen lived.

Jet: How did they get past the fort?

Philo: You tell me once you take their heads.

Jet jumped off the left side of the castle and saw smoke rise from where the village would be.

Jet: CRAP!!!

Jet made haste to the village.

Meanwhile San and Captain Philo headed toward the keep. Once inside they saw the green light on the wall. Twenty soldiers were inside the keep with them all ready to fight at any second. Then the circle of light dissolved the stone wall into dust. The wizard disappeared when it did.

Trolls came charging into the keep weapons ready. They clashed and it only took a minute until a few trolls made it past the first line if defenders.

San stood there perfectly calm both his kodaichi ready. A troll came running toward him his sword high in the air ready to spilt San in two. San put his left hand on his kodaichi and when the troll was about to strike down san drew his blade and smashed its hilt into the trolls sword hilt knocking the sword out of the troll’s hands. Then San drew his other kodaichi and split the troll in half from across the mid section

Another troll came to San armed with a spear. He stabbed at San who evaded by side stepping then cut the spears blade off with the right handed kodaichi. With the blade still upside down in his left hand he hacked at the troll’s chest then again with the right making an x mark on the troll. Another troll lunged his sword at San. San knocked the sword away with the left kodaichi then stabbed into the trolls face with the other. He pulled the short sword out of the troll and waited for another attack.

San: I hope Jet is doing better than I am.

To be continued...
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Postby Solid Ronin » Tue May 11, 2004 4:37 pm

The story you have just read was the first part of chapter three. I had to devide the chapter into four parts so I post something cause it was taking so long...Well i hope you enjoyed it and if you want more fight thats ok cause more fighting is coming a quickly as I can give it........I keep to learn to type
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Postby Ashley » Tue May 11, 2004 7:00 pm

Very nice, Ronin. The action is described accurately without being gorey--which is a hard line to walk. Thanks for the warning about the language too--that was appriciated.

Keep me updated! Can't wait to see more.
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Postby uc pseudonym » Wed May 12, 2004 11:20 am

Yes, the warning was in good taste.

I have only one complaint, which would be this: at times you flat out tell us something (ie Tokyo Castle is where the queen lived), which leads to boring reading. It is better to either be more elaborate with how you state that or have a character reveal the information to the reader. However, that has its own pitfalls, such as:

"...Tokyo Castle."
"You mean where the Queen lives?"

That sounds unnatural. There ways around it, such as:

"Tokyo Castle."
"How much danger is the Queen in?"

but I am certain you can be creative on your own. Thank you for getting the first portion of chapter 3 out for us.
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Postby Solid Ronin » Wed May 12, 2004 4:38 pm

uc pseudonym wrote:Yes, the warning was in good taste.

I have only one complaint, which would be this: at times you flat out tell us something (ie Tokyo Castle is where the queen lived), which leads to boring reading. It is better to either be more elaborate with how you state that or have a character reveal the information to the reader. However, that has its own pitfalls, such as:

"...Tokyo Castle."
"You mean where the Queen lives?"

That sounds unnatural. There ways around it, such as:

"Tokyo Castle."
"How much danger is the Queen in?"

but I am certain you can be creative on your own. Thank you for getting the first portion of chapter 3 out for us.


When I was typing this I was kinda annoyed since I'm a slow typist so I just gave out what Tokyo Castle was. Only when i re-read it did I know that my putting the line like that was horrible. Anywho I just hope you enjoyed the fighting (which is the best thing about my writing).

Next Part:

Jet heads to Honshu Village and encounters the troll team. At the same time Vincent enters the town.
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Postby uc pseudonym » Thu May 13, 2004 5:26 am

Yes, the fighting was pretty good. Battles against flunkies are more difficult than those between powerful warriors, but you handled it well enough. And it is always good to hear that I am in the next portion of the story.
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Postby Razgriz » Sat May 15, 2004 12:33 pm

The fight scene is very well done, keep up the good work. :thumb:
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Postby Locke » Wed May 19, 2004 9:22 pm

its goin good mang!!

keep it up!
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Postby c-girl » Sat May 22, 2004 4:15 pm

I like it a lot! keep it up. :thumb:
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Postby Solid Ronin » Fri Jun 04, 2004 7:59 pm

christiangirl wrote:I like it a lot! keep it up. :thumb:



Dose anyone else find it funny that this wave of trolls have started thier attack on the site like my story.

Edit: It looks much better.
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Postby Solid Ronin » Fri Jul 30, 2004 9:55 am

Well good news...I got some one to type the story! Now they should be coming out MUCH faster. Although I dont like depending on other this also gives me time to further fleah out my story.

Mod.s: The Mod.s of C.A.A are the police force of the Island ,but also erve in the military as well. Thier training consist of stealth and unarmed , armed combat taken from ninpo (ninjutsu), with other unarmed techniques from Karate.

Every village on the island is "given" to a Mod./s to keep order in thier assigned town which they do in the utmost seriousness. They are held in high respect by all and are widly popular in the villages ,children go as far as claiming them to be Superheroes.

Infamous Mod.s.

Vincent: Despite his fame Vincent has only been seen in person by a few ,mostly Mod.s or Admin.s, His skils in battle are legendary to the extend that he is past off as legend. Most people believe in this and his tales are told as childrens fables.

Inkhana: Her skills are *average , but her masterary in stealth rivials that of the ninja. Her skill is so great in that no one has seen her face, not even the Queen Ashley.

*in a Mod.s sense which is very high
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