This critique is going to be honest and detailed, so be prepared.
The poem starts off with a set meter but quickly looses that after the second stanza. At that point, there is a mixture of rhyme and free verse that I don't think works well. The switching interrupts the flow and some of the later rhymes like "Look up above/And close your eyes./Go to your heart and be surprised" feel a little forced.
Although the syllable count has a mostly consistent pattern, the meter is off in some places, which makes certain parts of the poem clunky. This website has basic examples of different kinds of meter:
http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/meter.htmlThis is why you need to decide if you want this piece to be form poetry or free verse. If you're going to include both forms, make the switches clear and intentional for the meaning of the poem as a whole. For example, metered stanzas can convey the structure and harmony God provides while free verse stanzas can convey the disorder of earthly existence.
Moving on to the content of the poem, I found it to be just a repeat of every other joyous resurrection phrase that Christians have thought of. There is nothing wrong with using those phrases, but I don't see anything in this poem that shows your distinct voice. I'm sure you can think of ways to put the Resurrection in words that don't simply rehash the language Christians have been using for centuries. I would suggest looking at poetry/music that portrays Christianity in very distinct ways. Here are some examples:
Thrice--"Silver Wings":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A9uz51a_geshttp://www.lyrics007.com/Thrice%20Lyrics/Silver%20Wings%20Lyrics.htmlAs an added bonus, this song is a sonnet so you can really see what smooth metered poetry looks like.
Thrice--"The Messenger":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Spe3mAN-Y9IThrice--"Moving Mountains":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1li2hfgNQoMThrice--"Come All You Weary":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GlRmKBYbymIhttp://www.plyrics.com/lyrics/thrice/comeallyouweary.htmlmewithoutYou--"A Stick, a Carrot, and String":
http://www.songlyrics.com/mewithoutyou/a-stick-a-carrot-string-lyrics/http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JNdC7oDEQacmewithoutYou tends to have a very interesting way of formatting their poems, which isn't replicated on lyrics websites, but you can still get the basic idea.
mewithoutYou--"Paper Hangar":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zXNBzhGI83Ahttp://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/paper-hanger-lyrics-mewithoutyou-me-without-you/175f9528ed46dcbf48256f2500095e47mewithoutYou--"In A Sweater Poorly Knit":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o4g-3WRXIts&playnext=1&list=PL73E9F827B8775596Showbread--"Matthias Replaces Judas":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CIRxb2y3H1wShowbread--"The Beginning (Nervosa)":
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ito6N6BVwxASo that's basically all I have to say. If you're really interested in writing poetry, I suggest taking classes whenever you have the chance so you can expose yourself to the variety of ways a poem can be formed. Good luck!
