"SherlockHolmes+RurouniKenshin"

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"SherlockHolmes+RurouniKenshin"

Postby starstoryteller » Sun Jun 06, 2004 11:57 pm

this is my first fanfiction it is rated about mildly PG-13.
and so here is my story. Sherlock belongs to Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
and Kenshin and crew belong to Nobuhiro Watsuki.

Intro
It had poured down rain in London for two days straight and looked like it was not going to let up.
Watson stepped out of the buggy, quickly paying the diver and ran as fast as he could because his broken umbrella was half open offering little shelter from the rain.
With in seconds he was under the eaves of the infamous building on 221b Baker St. to see the man who had made it so well known.

He rang the doorbell, shuffled his feet while waiting. Miss Hudson squinted though the peephole and sighed musically in relive to see Watson.

"Oh thank God you're here Doctor."
"What seems to be the matter?"
"Ughh a courier arrived with an a official looking envelope / with some strange lettering Chinese, Japanese or something of that sort. Anyway he's been in a dither ever since."
Miss Hudson opened the door then toke the broken umbrella expertly form his slightly wet hands. Then she led him up the stairs and rapped briskly on the door.
"WHAT NOW!!!" Holmes thundered form inside his flat.
"Watson’s 'ere! Better open up!" hollered Miss Hudson in shrill voice, her cockney accent emerging out of her frustration.
The door swung wildly open revealing a glowering, disheveled Sherlock Holmes.
"Get in and looked it behind you."
Watson raise an eyebrow, tip his hat to Miss Hudson and stepped unawares into one to one of the greatest adventures of his life.

Chap.2

Holmes study was never usually tidy until Miss Hudson meddled her way into the room and cleaned it. But this was chaos.
Books were strewn about form corner to corner. Regardless how hard he tried he could not avoid stepping on a text or two.
"Holmes what going on here?"
Holmes said nothing but flittered like a moth form volume to volume.
"If you don't mind my asking what are you up to?"
"Watson do you know of the island nation of Japan?"
"Well I've heard of it, although I don't know very much about it." Watson answered truthfully.
"Well the British Embassy station there has been threatened on numerous occasions. It has been suggested that one of the main culprits are members of the Satsuma clan, who murdered a British merchant, then the British fleet bombards Kagoshima in retaliation in the year 1863."
"I was stationed in Afghanistan then."
Watson softly replied, with memories awash in his mind.
"They have a man investigating the case.
His name is Saito Hajime but the British Government would prefer if a British detective did examine the case as well."

Holmes sauntered over to the messy desk and thumbed though some papers and produced documents and put them on the coffee table.
"Here are the travel plans to Japan, first we'll take the or..."
"What just a moment Holmes! Are you suggesting that I' am going to be dragged along on this trip?"
"Why not? Your the only one who can stand going far away form the comforts of home."
"As long as it's in Europe...but this is so far..."
"Why not "Blaze a new trail" as the American saying goes."
Watson did not say anything. Carefully, weighing out the cost of his decision.
"...Alright I'll come with you."
"I thought you would." Holmes said with indifference but Watson knew that he was glad that he was coming with him.

One mouth later...

Watson was very irritable near the end of the trip. He did fine on the train to India, but the steamship is were he had some difficulty Watson had some sea sickness for three weeks and still felt a little dizzy form time to time. Watson sat on the benches provided for the passengers.
He heard a loud dog bark and rolled his eyes. Toby the bloodhound who Holmes insisted they would take along frequently had got in the galley much to the cook’s dismay.
As he sat there he wondered when he could ever get back on land


well thats all for now folks please Post :grin:
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Wed Jun 09, 2004 6:09 pm

I'll be honest. I felt really bad that no one has responded to this thread, and it's sinking to the bottom of the writing section without one comment.

I finally read this and thought, you know the writing isn't so bad, but the spelling is atrocious. I think there was a misspelled word on every line. That makes it very hard to read.

Now, although it has poor spelling, I can see that you are trying very hard and it's a very good bit of writing. Are you a reader? Do you read Sherlock Holmes? I'm mainly curious.

It might be helpful to use the Word program and do a spell check while you're writing. It would help a bunch. I always take advantage of any tool available, so I don't have to self-edit. ^___^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby starstoryteller » Wed Jun 09, 2004 9:50 pm

I edited it so it user friendly ^^ ya spelling is my weakness :shake: And I did this at 11 p.m. :eh:
I love to read I only read one of Sherlock Holmes books.
But I thought that hey they are in the 18th century so why not? they are awsome characters.(Kenshin and Sherlock). Please people post O.K.
Clar
:comp: "Foul Beast"

Jesus is the Lord of the Kings

I love hypper people :hug:

"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Jun 10, 2004 9:15 am

Thanks for correcting your spelling. I think it's a great idea to get Sherlock Holmes and Kenshin together. What a smart idea. ^___^ Anyways, good stuff.

Sorry if I was harsh on the spelling, but it does help us readers out when we don't have to decipher every other word. Now, I have another piece of advice, would you please seperate the paragraphs, so that they're not all clumped together. I mean write a paragraph, space, next paragraph. It's just makes for easier reading. Thanks. ^_~

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Thu Jun 10, 2004 11:49 am

Wow you have a really good imagination i never really liked reading books that much but this is way better then the boxcar children books i used to read a long time ago i havent really read nothing just to read it in a long time... I could never come up with something like this.. haha if i tried it would be really plain and boring like holmes goes to find something in japan and there is mass killings and the blame lands right on kenshin but yeah you dont want to hear me make stuff up come on dont leave me hanging! how many more chapters are there going to be im amazed in your creativity of putting sherlock and kenshin into a fanfic ill be waiting for more chapters.. PM me when you have more up or ill keep checking now from time to time and when its finished if you dont mind ill put it on my site.. its not the greatest site but hey i just like having a site or 2 haha well keep it up Star Story Teller
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Postby starstoryteller » Thu Jun 10, 2004 10:39 pm

HEY the boxcar childern where smiple but good books. You will put me on your site? No frig..err does that count as a swear-word? Yes put me on the site. Well i get a little help from my mentor Rick(He loved the story so much and has a lot of fun wirting it with me^^).
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby starstoryteller » Thu Jun 10, 2004 10:45 pm

No hard feelings Cloe ^^ *hugs* thanks I think you save me a lot of grief. At the moment I did not care what you said just as long as it was a post ^^"
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby starstoryteller » Fri Jun 11, 2004 7:03 pm

Chap.3

Saito Hajime was not in a good mood.
He tried every “persuasionâ€
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Sat Jun 12, 2004 2:57 pm

wow much better now its getting more interesting! but just a question are they still on a boat? or did they get on land yet?
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Postby starstoryteller » Sat Jun 12, 2004 9:59 pm

They are not on land yet
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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I love hypper people :hug:

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"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Sun Jun 13, 2004 4:56 pm

ok thanks for clearing that up for me
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Postby *Hope* » Sun Jun 13, 2004 7:06 pm

More!! I want more!! :grin: I really enjoyed that! please post more. I wan to see my keshnin. (wrong spelling intended)
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Postby starstoryteller » Mon Jun 14, 2004 12:16 pm

ahmm OUR Kenshin...Wait...did I just turn into ...a....FANGIRL!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh no my rep is runed....right Kenshin is going to come in to the story a little later because I got to set the stage for him....I am not a fangirl *eye twitches*
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby starstoryteller » Tue Jun 15, 2004 8:29 pm

Chap. 4
“About time we got of this blasted ship.â€
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Wed Jun 16, 2004 12:41 am

Much better.. more interesting and funny the first 2 chapters were a little eh but it got so much better now!! its just like anime first 2 or 3 episodes stink until things start to pick up a little.. keep it up!
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Wed Jun 16, 2004 12:41 am

double post please delete
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Postby *Hope* » Wed Jun 16, 2004 4:09 pm

More! Please, I beg you! I can't live without more...... :drool: :eh: Maybe that was a bit over the top....oh well. Post more soon or I'll be forced to kidnap Kenshin!!
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Postby starstoryteller » Sun Jun 20, 2004 1:58 pm

Chap.5
Both Watson and Holmes head turned at the sound of the shriek.
“I am going to kill that dog.â€
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Sun Jun 20, 2004 10:45 pm

lol im an idiot i was reading chapter 4 and was like this is familiar and then i saw i could scroll down more.. lol does that 9 yr old play a part in the rest of the story? or no because now im trying to imagine
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Postby starstoryteller » Tue Jun 22, 2004 9:04 am

I'm not telling. ^.<
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby Vash is a plant » Thu Jun 24, 2004 5:57 am

YEA! Saitou-ness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This turning out great! Have you thought of posting it on fanfiction.net?
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Postby starstoryteller » Fri Jun 25, 2004 9:45 am

uh...ya I did post it on there
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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I love hypper people :hug:

"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby starstoryteller » Fri Jul 02, 2004 8:12 pm

that was not my best art belive me (For the avatar).
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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I love hypper people :hug:

"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Sat Jul 03, 2004 1:51 pm

Sooo...... Star Story Teller can I be expecting the next chapter any time soon? PM me when its up
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Postby starstoryteller » Mon Jul 05, 2004 10:14 pm

Chap.6

Tsubame found the Embassy very quickly with Holmes and Watson bringing up the rear.
The good Doctor was becoming weary from being in unusual territory, and hoped that the Embassy might be a little piece of England in this exotic land.
Watson’s wish was granted.
As the threesome came in through a door no larger than that of 10 Downing Street, they forgot for a moment that they were in Japan.
There were Persian rugs on the floor; portraits of royalty on the wall, and all were dressed in proper English business attire.
Tsubame took off her sandals and began looking around for a place to put them. Holmes asked her why, and as she gave her reply, Watson surprised himself as he picked out something about dirty shoes.
Holmes assured her that it was quite all right.
Then the warm hands of Ambassador Sir Theodore greeted them all.
Ohaio gozaimasu! He welcomed them first in Japanese (which was a simple ‘Good Morning’), then in English, “Hello and welcome to the Land of the Rising Sun.â€
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Tue Jul 06, 2004 12:11 pm

hehe cant wait for the next chapter! this one was excelent
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Postby Vash is a plant » Wed Jul 07, 2004 5:52 am

Yea! Yea for Saitou-ness! *pokes starstoryteller* You have to update soon, ohay?
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Postby Sephiroth » Thu Jul 08, 2004 5:19 pm

:cool: this is cool, its getting better the further into the story it goes, keep up the good work :thumbsup:
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Postby Heart of Sword » Sat Jul 10, 2004 4:43 pm

You're good! ^^
Heart of Sword's Rhapsody

Money, get away
Get a good job with good pay and you're okay
And all and all you're just another brick in the wall
Shoutin’ in the street gonna take on the world some day
But Bismallah will not let me go
Because I'll see you on the dark side of the moon

Tommy used to work on the docks
Union's been on strike
Bright eyes burning like fire
And exposing every weakness
However carefully hidden by the kids

Who will love a little Sparrow
Who's traveled far and cries for rest
Spare him his life from this monstrosity

I've seen a million faces and I've rocked them all
And if the band youre in starts playing different tunes
We will we will rock you
We will we will rock you!

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Postby starstoryteller » Mon Jul 12, 2004 5:45 pm

Chap.7

“By George, I never thought I’d ever be this far from homeâ€
:comp: "Foul Beast"

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"...art can teach without at all ceasing to be art."

"Love may forgive all infirmities and love still in spite of them: but Love cannot cease to will their removal."

"If I find in myself a desire which no experience in this world can satisfy, the most probable explanation is that I was made for another world."

the words of C.S. Lewis "Jack"
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