Kingdom Chronicles #1

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Kingdom Chronicles #1

Postby firestorm » Sun Aug 31, 2003 10:48 am

125 years ago- many ages ago in the world of Titanica, on the island kingdom of Volcana, there was a boy named
Tanuk Rei whose his father was a high priest. But the cathedral he preached in wasn't a normal cathedral, it was a magical one, one of great power. One day an evil warrior named Brutus wanted to take over the church and use it for his own evil agenda, of course the high priest refused him. This made Brutus furious. So one day, Brutus got an army of warriors to come together, the largest the boy has ever seen, and they attacked the large cathedral. As soon as his father, found out the high priest told tanuk's mother to go and take the boy to the far off Kingdom of Lenaria, a desert Kingdom and as the boy boarded the ship he cold see the cathedral being burnt down, and he could here the horrible cry of his father dying, "Fatheerrrrrr, Faaatthherrrrrr!!!!" cried little Tanuk. He sailed on the high seas for about 2-3months.

When he reached Lenaria, he met his uncle Canuk, who was a wizard (later to be involved in the Wizard Wars, which was a great war that happened in Titanica). His uncle taught him magic, martial arts, stealth, and many other things. When he was 21 he left the care of his mother and uncle and left to the Kingdom of Aurion. Before he left his uncle gave him the most awesome sword anyone has ever seen. The shape of the sword reminded him of the wild flames of a fire. Once at Aurion, he met a female avian named Missy. Two years later they married and had children. One child was an avian named Will, and the other was a human named Tanuk Jr. When he was 25 he received a message from the Kingdom of Lenaria. It said that a new cathedral was built right after Tanuk left. Lead by Brutus and his army, all those that go to Lenaria where taken as slaves, and those who were members of the old cathedral were also slaves and if they did not obey they were to be to death. After reading the message, Tanuk knew it was time to go back. So he took his wife and children, and went to the kingdom of Lenaria. When he got there he rose up an army of brutus’ slaves to fight Brutus and his army, and after praying to their gods, they marched to Brutus’ cathedral and began their attack the war waged on for hours, but with not so good results. For you see, even though Tanuk’s army survived and won. Tanuk did not. Both Brutus and Tanuk killed each other during battle. Once the battle was over and brutus' en had retreated, tanuk’s men finally realized what has happened, and built a new cathedral on top of where his father’s was in honor of his death. To help get rid of the past, they sent the 25 main pieces that where left of Brutus’ Cathedral all across the land of Titanica.

Mean while Brutus’ men believed that he would come back and that he will one day come back to them and they will destroy Tanuk’s army. So they waited.

Two days ago-125 years after the battle between Tanuk and Brutus, the ancestors of Brutus’ men were tired of waiting for brutus, so they got there most powerful magician to bring him up from the dead. They succeeded. Sort of. See this isn’t the Brutus they knew. This was a demon in the appearance of Brutus, bent on destroying all life. This demon was a horrible monster it had armor that was impenetrable and it had twin blades that were forged of demonic power. The demon told them that he was not at full strength and that when they 25 main pieces of Brutus’ cathedral he will be more powerful than they ever imagined

Modern day- the great, great, great grandson of Tanuk is Tanakta –no Rei. He was the high priest of Tanuk’s cathedral called the new cathedral of God. He, as well as ancestors before him, trained in the martial arts and stealth. They choose which type of magic they want to learn. He wants to learn White magic. Two days ago he had a dream, and in the dream an angel came to him, and told him that Brutus has revived, and that he was the only one who can stop him. Tanakata thought she was an avian (angel-like creatures that live in that world) and not an angel. Tanakta was not sure at first even when the angel gave him Tanuk’s blade which he calls the Spirit Blade and told him that that sword was the one of only three weapons that could kill Brutus, he still wasn’t 100% sure that this was for real, but When he woke up and turned over, he accidentally cut himself with the Spirit Blade. Now he was sure that this was for real. When he got to the cathedral his junior pastor Will the 4th, a descendent of Will, Tanuk’s avian son told him that he had the same dream except that he was given a spirit axe Tanuk decided that it would be good for Will the 4th to come with him. So they appointed the two next junior priests in line as junior and senior high priests, and with that they left on their new adventure with money in hand and excitement in their hearts. Their first stop: Lenaria!

P.S. there is a legend that says the spirit blade contains all the magic that Tanuk had.
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Postby uc pseudonym » Sun Aug 31, 2003 11:35 am

Well, it does feel like a Chronicle, but that isn't necessarily a bad thing. The style is somewhat interesting. You might want to read over it again, there are some things I'm sure you'd correct if you knew they were there.

Two things, though. First: you might want to define avian a bit earlier. I got the impression, but it could help. Second: make sure you specify that it is a desert kingdom, not a dessert kingdom. Bit of a difference.

Anyway, keep writing.
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Postby firestorm » Sun Aug 31, 2003 11:56 am

Kingdom Chronicles #2
Wake up, Tanakata, Wake up, you are needed.”

“Huh, who is it? Oh, it’s you Avian? What is your problem?"

“A girl will be in very deep danger soon. Hurry to the nearest village. You will see her on the way. Now, AWAKEN!!!!"

Tanakata awoke with a jolt. He was in the middle of a jungle. There was trickling stream. The sound was so soothing and harmonic that One could almost fell asleep. It sounded so peaceful, so tranquil. The smells on the other hand weren’t that good. The bad smell of burnt eggs was overwhelming. Which only meant one thing. Will was making Breakfast. Which never was a good thing.

If there is one thing I got to say about Will Thought Tanakata He might be a good friend and all but I would gladly take Mc. Donald’s or BK over his cooking any day.

“Good morning my friend, would you like some breakfast” said Will, cooking scrambled eggs over a hot fire, the eggs sizzling over the hot pan. Some of the butter spills on Will’s Red armor. “Man, I hate it when that happens.” So Will one’s one of his wings, moves it his shoulder and begins to wipe it off. “The bigger quicker picker upper. Yup, this is the only other thing these things are used Yup uh-huh.”

Tanakata walked to his sword and took it from it’s sheath and began to practice with it, the sword flashing brilliantly as he slashes and cuts through air, looking even more graceful then a dancer. “Skip breakfast today Will. The Avian told me that we must go to the nearest village…”

To rescue some girl.” Interrupted Will. “The Avian contacts me too, ya know.”

“Yes true, one thing I also know is not to eat your cooking.” Said Tanakata, swinging the sword around his head. A few minutes later he stops and grabs a bag clothes nearby and then goes behind some trees.

“It doesn’t taste that bad” Will complained.

“Oh and Choking on a Meat Ball and almost throwing up is iron chef quality.” Said Tanakata from behind the trees.

“Hey, that hurt” Will said, “Is it my fault I that It was my first time cooking.” Who was already fully dressed with a pair of brown pants, a sleeveless, red and blue robe that goes all the way down to his knees, ancient Japanese warrior-style shoulder guards, and a Japanese-style hat.

“Will, look it was a T.V. dinner, the instructions where on the back of the box.” said Tanakata, “Now come on, it’s time to go.” And with that he turned around and headed toward the village.

“Hey, take that back, Hey, Hey, come back here, I’m not done talking to you. Jerk.”


So they both headed towards the nearest village, and adventure

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“It’s an empty street nobody will see me” she said to herself. “Brutus, once I steal some money, I’m coming after you and your stupid little legion of morons” she sneaks silently toward the shop, like a snake in tall grass. She was moving so silently you can’t even hear her breath. She tries to stay in the shadows, but sometimes a ray of sunlight crosses here path, Revealing her beautiful figure, cute face, gorgeous red/silver hair, and her awesome blue/green eyes. You could plainly see her wings under her trench coat as she tries to avoid being seen by people in the other shops around her. She reaches the nearby shop “The Doors closed. No matter nothing will stop me.” She pulls out a pick from her ponytail, and her hair falls down in flash of red and silver as she unlocks the door. She goes in. a few minutes later an alarm goes off! Every body runs outside to see what’s wrong! Panic starts filling the streets as the door opens furiously and the girl runs out of the shop. Right behind her was the shop owner. Apparently he just finished stocking up on goods when he saw her.

“Police, Police arrest her!” He cried out.

But they, were to late, she had already took off her trench coat, opened her fairy wings and she hit the first air current and rose above flying as fast as her fairy wings could carry her.


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About an hour later-

“Yes I can’t believe it I didn’t get caught. This is so awesome.” She said, still flying pretty fast, but then as she was flying a band of roughneck Avians flew by.

“ You lost little girl?” Said the leader.

“Get lost, freak.” She said

“ You shouldn’t be talking girl, you a little freaky yourself?

“You want a piece of me little boy?”

A bunch of “Ohhh's" came from the rest of the gang, “Shut up” the leader to said them. “Seems like we need to teach her a lesson huh gang. What your name?

“My name’s Mist, you could call me your worst nightmare, oh wait, no, isn’t that what you call your girlfriend? Or is that what she calls you?

“Oh your gonna pay for that!”

“Try me”

With that the fight began…
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Postby LillyAngel » Sun Aug 31, 2003 8:52 pm

That most definatly rules! ^.^

Silly Penguin Girl lol
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Postby uc pseudonym » Mon Sep 01, 2003 4:40 am

Ah, so we break from the historical narrative. That works fine with me. We'll see where this goes.
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Postby firestorm » Sat Feb 07, 2004 11:26 pm

another classic I wish to further
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