Yet another poem. More comments?

[Gekkeiju]

Upon request, I have posted another poem I wrote. This one is about struggles with the end of a really close friendship.

Fallen Tears

There is nothing that you can do
That will stop my falling tears.
I have been holding all of them back
For far too many years.

I can see you turn your head
'Cause you hate to see me cry.
The lost connections between each other
Are what made our relationship die.

I'm crying over what I've gained
Instead of what I've lost.
I feel so unworthy from my gains -
Could all this guilt be the cost?

From all the times that I have snapped
When nothing seemed to be right;
I guess whenever I'd say "I'm sorry,"
The phrase just seemed too trite.

It feels that my sins are so extreme
That the only one who can forgive
Is the Lord Himself; but for everyone else,
The sins get caught in their sieves.

So now in public I'm by myself
With only the Lord at my side.
I feel so alone from those boring eyes
That make me just want to hide.

Oh, what I'd give for another friend
Who'd for me be always there.
But I feel like a stranger in these lands
Where nobody seems to care.

Alone at heart, I cry to myself,
Wishing that someone would come.
But I guess no one will dare to approach
So now I'm without a chum.

I guess now I must correct myself
And say that I was wrong;
I'm crying because we won't speak
While we could be getting along.

[shadowblade]

Very sad piece. Writing is a good way to get all your emotions out though; it helps a lot. Anyway, I think you did a good job; your piece flowed very well.

[Ssjjvash]

yup, I've been there. *sigh*
Good poem, I really like it.

[Jaltus-bot]

Please continue writing poems. You really captured the emotions beautifully.

[ice122985]

i liked it. keep it up.

[Kanrad]

Very good. A tantalizing visual, extensive emotional, which I will say seem to dominate your works, and a healthy dose of the philosophical.