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Postby Swordguy » Tue Oct 05, 2004 1:19 pm

Here is a poam i wrote last year that i just found so i figured why not....


Time

From minute to minute
We see time flow
To live each day
We do not know
From where we come
To where we go
We just live our lives
From sun to snow

Purpose or meaning
It escapes our grip
Hoping that one day
Our luck will flip
Trying to escape this
Path, which we walk
A thing called agape
We hear people talk

Mostly ignored
And shoved aside
We see some people
Who about this abide
“Look at them
Their hopeless livesâ€
I used to "Follow" Him because i had to....now i would give everything to follow Him.

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rei wrote:"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."


[quote="The forgoten"] .â€
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Postby Ssjjvash » Tue Oct 05, 2004 1:57 pm

I like it; it's very very good!
If you can force your heart and nerve and sinew
To serve your turn long after they are gone
And so hold on when there is nothing left in you
Except the Will which says to them: 'Hold on!' ...you'll be a Man, my son!

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Postby ShiroiHikari » Tue Oct 05, 2004 2:00 pm

hey, nice job. almost sounds like a song :]
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Tue Oct 05, 2004 9:51 pm

That's really good Swordguy. I would encourage you to try writing something like this again.
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby Ducky » Tue Oct 05, 2004 10:07 pm

Nice poem. I like the last two lines the best.
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Postby Banana-chan » Tue Oct 05, 2004 10:41 pm

*Sniff sniff* that was beautiful! ^_______^
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Postby Banana-chan » Tue Oct 05, 2004 10:42 pm

*Sniff sniff* that was beautiful! ^_______^
C.T.'s pet chipmunk and daughter. I love my daddy and mommy!

C.T.= Daddy
AgentSmith700=Mommy!

Pets/People I've adopted:
-Sunako (Half Kitty)
-Wingzero22 (Wolf)
-Nami (Tiger)
-Ky Kiske (something from the ocean ^^;;;; )
-Firestorm (Flame kitty)
-Sonic_13
-Sakura15 (wolf)
-Agentsmith700 (Yes i adopted my mother...he's a turtle! X3)

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Postby Swordguy » Wed Oct 06, 2004 7:34 pm

fine Shez here you go one more....

Father

Immersed in the darkness
Alone there I stood
My face was pale, anguished
I hadn’t done what I should
The deed it enticed me
My flesh it gave in
Only I was to blame
Oh why did I sin?

I spat in His face,
I cursed his name
To Him I turned my back,
I wasn’t the same
I stepped out of the light
Into the darkness, shrouding me
I left my father, His love
pride was all that I could see

The guilt it swept over me
Like a wave of the sea
Convicted, contrite, remorse
Why was this happening to me?
Why had I left Him,
Why did I leave that love?
It wasn’t an enemy from the right,
Left, below or above

The mistake I had made,
Was it too late to fix
Would His love be the same,
Or His feelings would they mix?
I knew one thing for sure,
I abide in this darkness no more.
To Him I shall turn, His love
I longed for down in my core.

Father, Father where are you
Here I am your son, lost
I am confused, dismayed
I want to be with you no mater the cost
With that being said,
My head in the sand.
Then on my shoulder,
He placed His hand

What this can’t be,
How can He forgive?
These sins of mine
This life that I live
My side He never left
No mater what I did
It was for me,
His life, my soul, that was the bid

How could He do it?
Took torment and shame
My soul it would save
If to Him I just came
The darkness has faded
Now vibrant and bold
My life is saved,
His life was sold.

I was lost, now am found
Was blind, now I see
No longer a sin natured man
I in Him, Him in me
He has adopted me
To join in Him forever
A son I am now called
Leave Him again? Never!

I love my DADDY
I used to "Follow" Him because i had to....now i would give everything to follow Him.

Me check it out!

Quest for the True Grail

rei wrote:"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."


[quote="The forgoten"] .â€
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Wed Oct 06, 2004 7:58 pm

Awesome job. :)
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby Banana-chan » Thu Oct 07, 2004 12:44 am

:waah!: o my goodness! awesome! these are really great cant wait to see more from you! :jump: hip hip hooray!

Nice one shehezerade! make him write more lol
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C.T.= Daddy
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Pets/People I've adopted:
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-Wingzero22 (Wolf)
-Nami (Tiger)
-Ky Kiske (something from the ocean ^^;;;; )
-Firestorm (Flame kitty)
-Sonic_13
-Sakura15 (wolf)
-Agentsmith700 (Yes i adopted my mother...he's a turtle! X3)

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Postby shadowblade » Thu Oct 07, 2004 7:08 am

Wow, both of them were very awesome pieces. I really enjoyed reading them. :) Keep up the great work!

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Postby Swordguy » Tue May 17, 2005 6:42 pm

well i knwo this is probably gravedigging but i have another work that goes with these two....it is called Son and it is from God's point of veiw with Father

My son there you go again
Walking the path of pride
The storms they came
And as you ran I sighed
I told you I would be there
Thru the storm and the rain
Be still your DADDY knows the way
Thru the hurt and the pain

My heart it sank, as into sorrow
Farther, and further you ran
I saw my little boy go
Into the world of man
Your side I never left
As the sin it ate at you
My love it never changed
Waiting, only if you knew

Deceit, lies, pain, and suffering
This is the world you now know
From my joy and sun
To sorrow and snow
The tears from my eyes fell
As the darkness consumes
You are enticed to walk
The path on which doom looms

My voice it is subtle, calling out
Son here I am, reach out to me
Yet in pride and selfishness
You are to blind to see
You are running towards death
Then you stop and look for me
Realizing where you are you fall
And call out from your knees

Father here I am you son,
Lost and alone, it is you I require
Immediately I reach out my hand
I lift you up out of that mire
Holding you close, your tears fall with mine
Over and over I here you repent
I see your heart and know
The change is truly meant

You are my son, I deeply love
I used to "Follow" Him because i had to....now i would give everything to follow Him.

Me check it out!

Quest for the True Grail

rei wrote:"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."


[quote="The forgoten"] .â€
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Postby Mr. SmartyPants » Tue May 17, 2005 6:53 pm

teh pwns! nice rhyme scheme!
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Postby ssj2gohan61 » Tue May 17, 2005 6:59 pm

very nice poem micah!
Love is that feeling you get when a girl looks at you and it feels like your driving a car at high speeds and experience a sudden drop. You know what i mean? That sudden sinking feeling you get in your stomach? Yeah, that's love. Leave's you speechless everytime.
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Postby Lynx » Tue May 17, 2005 7:03 pm

very nice!!!!!!!!!! write more!!!! like maybe more of a certain story....:P
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Postby Swordguy » Tue May 17, 2005 8:03 pm

well i have to find that story first....i hope i have all of it...
I used to "Follow" Him because i had to....now i would give everything to follow Him.

Me check it out!

Quest for the True Grail

rei wrote:"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."


[quote="The forgoten"] .â€
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Postby Swordguy » Thu Feb 23, 2006 9:01 pm

Here is my latest poem, i figured this is the best place to put it, if not sorry mods

Cry Out Loud

My heart I feel it’s weight
Dragging and pulling
But why, I ask
I recognize this mauling
running from it’s pain
It was alright I thought,
If I just ignore it
I will get the freedom I sought

Now however I what I seek
is to run towards the pain
but then another voice,
what are you doing this is insane
one doesn’t run towards the pain
pain is bad, you will die
I look from wench I come
Then forward and sigh

This is all wrong, Lord!
My voice cries out in desperation
Take My heart, rip it out
For what I seek is your emancipation
From this path I walk,
Lord I need you, your furnace
Mold this heart, no matter the pain
You know what I ask, that I am earnest

The pain, it is immense
The heat it surrounds
To my knees I fall
A strange feeling abounds
The heart which I hold
To sand it turns
It slips thru my fingers
Yet to hold it in I do not urn

The sand is gone
And what is this?
A piece of coal
Yet I don’t feel amiss
This is all that is left
My heart is coal?
Lord, what is this,
What have you done with my soul!
“I am not finishedâ€
I used to "Follow" Him because i had to....now i would give everything to follow Him.

Me check it out!

Quest for the True Grail

rei wrote:"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."
"Welcome to Corneria!"
"I like swords."


[quote="The forgoten"] .â€
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