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Postby serena » Mon Oct 18, 2004 12:24 pm

hey eveyone,

i don't know about everyone else but it's happened alot to me, i come up with some lines that sound like if they would be part of a poem but i can't think of the rest, well i wanted to post them anyways

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Postby serena » Mon Oct 18, 2004 12:27 pm

"it's these bitter tears that run down my face
that whisper the story of my sorrowful fate"


i don't know what do you guys think?
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Postby Kura Ookami » Mon Oct 18, 2004 2:34 pm

serena wrote:"it's these bitter tears that run down my face
that whisper the story of my sorrowful fate"


i don't know what do you guys think?


I like them. They could make a good poem if you could think of more to say.

I also find i can think of lines that would make a poem but cant think of enough. It can be frustrating at times.I wish i could think of more lines to help you but im out of ideas right now. For some reason i need to be in a certain mood to write poetry. Weird eh?
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Postby merrick » Tue Oct 19, 2004 5:54 am

definitely weird, but its good to know that i'm not the only one.
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Tue Oct 19, 2004 12:59 pm

I like them.
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Postby ice122985 » Tue Oct 19, 2004 1:32 pm

keep it up...eventually it will become real.
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Postby serena » Tue Oct 19, 2004 7:27 pm

thanks
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Postby serena » Wed Oct 20, 2004 6:00 am

today you left the world behind
and left me here to wonder why.
Why did you have to go,
and leave me here cold and alone?
I should be happy, that I know
you're in a better place now
were there's no suffering and no pain
and you're surrounded by God's love and grace,
but it's just one thing that makes me cry,
I never got to say goodbye.




i don't know guys, what do you all think?
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Postby mai » Wed Oct 20, 2004 8:34 am

Thats really pretty...and really sad, keep up the good work!.
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Postby Esoteric » Wed Oct 20, 2004 10:13 am

Very touching! Yes sir-ee, you've got the makings of a good poet.
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Postby Anna Mae » Fri Oct 22, 2004 5:33 am

That's beautiful serena!
Kura Ookami wrote:I also find i can think of lines that would make a poem but cant think of enough. It can be frustrating at times.I wish i could think of more lines to help you but im out of ideas right now. For some reason i need to be in a certain mood to write poetry. Weird eh?
Exactly! If I sit down and try to write a poem, I often can't do it. I have to have the right inspiration.
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Postby serena » Thu Oct 28, 2004 8:09 am

my life at 15




There's times in this so troubled world,

in which i doubt my own existence.

What I feel may not be real,

and what I see is naught but dreams.

The night is unbearably cold,

I fell depressed an all alone.

I've been forsaken by the world.

A blade, two cuts, the red blood flows,

it all goes dark as my eyes close.




The morning comes, I'm still alive,

I open my eyes to see the light.

the warmth surrounds me and I feel loved.

Happiness fills me for now I know,

that no matter what, i'm loved by the Lord.




this poem is about a time in my life that was really messed up, and i'm glad that i was able to overcome it and move on. i realized that to attempted suicide is just a call for help and i was so lost that i didn't realize that god was with me all along
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Postby ice122985 » Thu Oct 28, 2004 9:11 am

i'm glad you survived your attempt at suicide; God must have been looking out for you; after all, there are many who don't quite make it....
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Thu Oct 28, 2004 11:43 am

Serena, you got talent. I'm pleased to see that you are posting more stuff here. Keep up the good work. :) That's what I think.
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Postby Anna Mae » Thu Oct 28, 2004 1:16 pm

I agree!
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“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
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