"Your Name…" u guys wanted another one of my poems, here's one!

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"Your Name…" u guys wanted another one of my poems, here's one!

Postby LostChild » Tue Nov 23, 2004 8:24 pm

When I hear your name,
My heart skips a beat.
I long to see your face,
To have you surround my presence.

When I hear your name,
Time seems to stand still.
If not only for a minute,
It stands still for hours.

Your name shall be
renowned To the world.
If your name is not only
Renowned to my ears.

I hear your name always,
When I wake and when I sleep.
In dreams its your name that gives me peace,
And in the day your name keeps me going.

Nothing that I know of,
can give your name the right respect.
Not book, film, or game,
No picture or thought will give your name justice.

In a crowd of people,
I could pick you off the bat.
That is how well I know you,
This is how I wish for you to know me.

I long to have myself always in your presence,
Just to be able to see you.
My heart stops and time stands still,
When I hear your name.
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Postby Magekind » Wed Nov 24, 2004 2:29 pm

I have given up on poetry these days. Not that I'm going to quit writing, but if this is what is expected out of poetry, I am done.

Nevermind my babbling. As for a direct comment on your poem, it is rather good. A nice piece of whatsitcalled type of poetry. Possibly with multiple uses.

Carry on. There may be a new generation capable of this kind of poetry.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby Anna Mae » Fri Nov 26, 2004 12:19 pm

This poem brings out many varied emotions... um yeah. Good stuff!
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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Postby LostChild » Sun Nov 28, 2004 5:17 pm

thanx u guys *sniffles* i'm touched, thanx for the encouragement.

i do believe that anyone can write anything, and it is ten times as much more special when it comes from the heart. so it doesn't matter how ya write it, just that ya do. don't give up! :thumb: :hug:
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Postby c.t.,girl » Sun Nov 28, 2004 5:24 pm

*wipes a tear from her eye* that is really good. it made me think of God and someone. it sounds like sorta what i've been wanting to say but couldn't find the words. you are a good writer. i hope you continue writing.
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Nov 28, 2004 10:09 pm

SEE THATS WHAT I'VE BEEN TELLING YOU LOST!!! YOUR A GOOD WRITER!!! See c.t.girl agrees with me! YOU ROCK MAN!!! :rock:
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Postby christianfriend » Sun Nov 28, 2004 11:29 pm

I agree with Sora!! YOU ROCK MAN!!
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Postby LostChild » Mon Nov 29, 2004 6:46 am

thanx all! :cool: u've all been really encouraging, and uplifting; i just hope i'll be able to do the same for yal when ya need it from me! :sweat:
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