A song

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A song

Postby Jaltus-bot » Wed Dec 01, 2004 12:07 pm

Down, trouble’s all around
Gone, I’m leaving this life

Life has its ups
And it has its downs
But I’m not gonna stay here
Any more

Right now,
I’ll take up this fight
Trouble
I’m sick of all this
Tonight,
I’ll be free of this
Trouble

So many times
All these problems
They got me down
Troubles all around
Everything went wrong

Nothing was what I wanted
What I thought that it would be
Everything made me
Oh so unhappy

Down, trouble’s all around
Gone, I’m leaving this life

Right now,
I’ll take up this fight
Trouble
I’m sick of all this
Tonight,
I’ll be free of this
Trouble

It’s not going to bring me down
Not any more ’cause I am free
And I will fly
Away tonight

Down, trouble’s all around
Gone, I’m leaving this life
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Wed Dec 01, 2004 12:35 pm

Sher, is everything going all right? This song sounds like a suicide note. You had better not be thinking this way. T_T This is really good, however, like everything you write. Have you written other songs?

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Esoteric » Wed Dec 01, 2004 1:01 pm

Don't do It!!!!!! Yeah, it does actually sound like a very depressed person. Like True_Noir_Cloe said, it's very well, written, as long as it's not autobiographical... :(
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Postby Anna Mae » Wed Dec 01, 2004 1:14 pm

I share Estoric and True_Noir_Cloe's sentiments. You said it was a song... what's the tune like? What style of music is it?
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Wed Dec 01, 2004 7:39 pm

It would not be autobiographical. I hate suicide from the deepest part of my gut. Life is worth too much to just end like that.

I didn't realize it sounded that suicidal. I meant it more as not accepting just being dragged down be things, sort of like if one were to say to little things that might be getting to him or her, "I'm going to stop letting you control my happiness anymore" and said with the attitude of one who was determined to change his life.

true_noir_chloe wrote:Have you written other songs?

Maybe two, three tops. One was a hymn I called Thankful. It was based on hymns I had read in the Lutheran Book of Worship. I through it out when I was getting rid of things. I regret that now. I can't even post it. Oh well.

Have you heard Bonnie McKee's song Trouble? If you have a yahoo account, you can listen to it on launch.com. I sort of imagined it sounding like that song. I'm not sure how to describe it. I would have to get back to you on that.
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

"A hero need not speak. For when he is gone, the world will speak for him."

"One of the nice things about diseases of the brain is they tend to slip your mind." Colbert
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Postby Esoteric » Thu Dec 02, 2004 8:37 am

Sheherazade wrote:I meant it more as not accepting just being dragged down be things, sort of like if one were to say to little things that might be getting to him or her, "I'm going to stop letting you control my happiness anymore" and said with the attitude of one who was determined to change his life.


Ah i see. I can read that out of it now. You might want to change/add a few lines about new beginnings so it doesn't read like suicide to us pesimists.

Anna Mae wrote:I share Estoric and True_Noir_Cloe's sentiments.


Estoric? Bwhahaha! Looks like I'm not the only one with trouble spelling names.
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Postby Anna Mae » Fri Dec 03, 2004 5:32 am

Oh. Oops! *hits self for misspelling Esoteric's name*I am really sorry! I feel like a moron now. I shall attempt to be more careful with my typing in the future (as you can probably tell, it's not my strong point).
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