this is my first poem ^^ heh hope you like ^^

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this is my first poem ^^ heh hope you like ^^

Postby girlninja » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:12 pm

waves of crashing wonder
wash over me
take my breath,
take my soul
invade all that i am
fill me whole
with blood and scorn.

These waves invade me
they take with them all that is evil into my soul
i feel the hatred
i feel the pain
harder then the nails i feel beside me
they do much worse
they take my heart
they stall my cries
they take my God away from me.

my heart is to burst
blood falls from me
the waves do this too.
angels wail while demons triumph
and the men below have no clue
to why i do such a thing
to why i let myself be consumed by this sea of desolence.

They wash and pour from the people before me
oblivious they do not see
but these waves invade me
coming from unseen futures,
untold past
they come into me
weigh me down
until i am full and the waves have stopped
It is done.

^^ i hope you like ^_^
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Postby girlninja » Sat Dec 25, 2004 3:24 pm

hmmmm did this one right off the cuff lol in like 2 secs so i guess it's not that good >< lol well back to the drawin board lol
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Sun Dec 26, 2004 1:40 pm

I like this.
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Postby girlninja » Sun Dec 26, 2004 1:51 pm

fyi for the poem ^^
just so ya know this is from Jesus perspective regarding the "waves" of sin that he recieved on the cross ^^ thankyou for reply's and/or any criticism ^^
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Postby Rachel » Sun Dec 26, 2004 2:21 pm

I like it.
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Postby Keckhs » Tue Dec 28, 2004 12:04 am

I love it ^_^
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5 points to anyone who can translate the following:
Namekemono no neko wa mazui na tabemono o tabemasu
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