Kaori wrote:Would it be possible for you to let us know in advance when you are planning on updating? I, for one, would find it helpful for the sake of planning how to manage my time, since it does take a significant length of time to read through one of these chapters.
uc pseudonym wrote:It will be interesting to see how this chapter changes the general opinion of Sasuke
Kaori wrote:What is a senbon?
Kaori wrote:In regard to the characterization of Sasuke, I found it very plausible.
Kaori wrote:I am very curious at this point to see what you will do with the characterizations of Hinata and Sasuke in future chapters.
In the past, I have sometimes used a technique fairly similar to yours. Recently, however, I have begun to favor a more detached style in which little is stated that would not be seen by a third-party observer. I find it an interesting challenge to try to convey the emotions of characters by external descriptions rather than by telling their thoughts directly, and the sparseness of this style, when I see other writers use it, appeals to me. Also, when it is necessary to tell what a character is thinking, it is sometimes possible to do so through dialogue by placing a character in a situation where he or she can state his or her emotions or opinions to some other character.uc pseudonym wrote:Purely out of curiosity, what technique, if any, do you prefer?
Part of the reason I am wary of direct insertion is that I feel that while the technique can be used well when skillfully handled, it is more difficult to pull off than some other styles. First person narrative is the same way--while it can be used to great effect by good writers, it also has the potential to be very weak when inexpertly applied. In the case of your writing, I believe that the insertion of the characters’ thoughts is handled well enough that it is not a weakness.uc pseudonym wrote:Directly inserting character thoughts is my preferred method of writing, as I feel it breaks the narrative the least of the available methods. Use of italics seems out of place to me and sometimes requires "he/she thought," which slows the story.
Kaori wrote:In the past, I have sometimes used a technique fairly similar to yours. Recently, however, I have begun to favor a more detached style in which little is stated that would not be seen by a third-party observer. I find it an interesting challenge to try to convey the emotions of characters by external descriptions rather than by telling their thoughts directly, and the sparseness of this style, when I see other writers use it, appeals to me. Also, when it is necessary to tell what a character is thinking, it is sometimes possible to do so through dialogue by placing a character in a situation where he or she can state his or her emotions or opinions to some other character.
EDIT: After looking over some of my own stories and fragments of stories, it seems that I it seems that I do frequently resort to narrational assertion to describe characters' emotional states. It is rare, however, for me to directly state a character's thoughts without using a signal phrase like "he thought" or "she wondered." I don't believe I have ever actually written anything as purely detatched as, say, Old Testament narrative stories.
Kaori wrote:While I do not typically speculate about character development per se, I had made a note to myself to pay attention to how the characterization of Hinata develops in future chapters, although that was more due to something you had told me about your intent to contrast the static characters of Ino and Sakura with Hinata's changing nature than to the story itself. I believe in this case it would be best to wait for a little while at least, if not to the end of the story itself, to make any generalizations about how the characters change throughout the story, since by nature this question can be best answered by a holistic view.
Kaori wrote:First off, while Sasuke's solution in the beginning of the chapter was not the most obvious one (I would have guessed that someone would sleep on the floor),
uc pseudonym wrote:Were this a novel you would not think so, as you would be have a rough feel for the overall size. Here I will merely state that the story is much longer than its current length.
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mastersquirrel wrote:Interesting, I thought it was moving fast, but I guess not.
uc pseudonym wrote:Glad to hear it. Meanwhile, I fear I must state something I believe you (in general) will not be glad to hear. I will be unable to update tomorrow, nor will I be able to update until March 1st.
kryptech wrote:Akk! Not until March? It was just this past week I started reading your work, UC, and I have really enjoyed it. The sad thing is I read it all in a couple days so I didn't ease into it like those who've been keeping up from the start. Now it is gonna be hard for me to patiently wait...
kryptech wrote:I haven't seen much of Naruto (the first 8 episodes and then a bunch around the 100 mark) but from what I've seen the characters in your work are quite recognizable (well, aside from Sukura being more aggressive). Sasuke always seems so mysterious and it is neat to learn a little more about him via Hinata's perspective. I eagerly wait to see what lays ahead for the foursome...
mastersquirrel wrote:I'm not sure what to make of the two boys and the girl being attacked.
mastersquirrel wrote:As for the training, I think it's a good way to understand more about the character of the characters (couldn't come up with a better way to say that).
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