Aldean Chronicles - Episode 1 Part 2

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Postby starwarsboy90 » Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:18 pm

Hey everybody, here's a little incent from Episode 1 part 2, I'm posting each part of the episode evey chance I get. It's airing date was 12/29/2004.


Aldean Chronicles
Episode 1, Part 2
“The Girl Who Cried Shi’adoâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:22 pm

He nodded to one of the children by the old dried-up well, a couple of yards away. Sakura watched in horror as the child picked up a baby Shi’ado the village children had captured. It squirmed in his grasp, but he held on with fierce determination. Then the child leaned over and threw it into the well. Suddenly, the ground shook violently, and there was a tremendous surge of air coming out of the well. Then Sakura heard the baby shriek followed by the unmistakable sound of its bones being snapped. Realization suddenly dawned on her, followed by a wave of nausea.
The bottom of the well was a Munarkie’s mouth.
Sakura shivered, imagining herself being eaten alive by a Munarkie. She looked up at Tav with dread, knowing she would be next.
“Leave her alone,â€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Wed Mar 23, 2005 7:24 pm

She wasn’t alone for long. Soon her keen ears picked up the sound of voices heading in her direction. She hoisted herself up from the ground and turned towards the sound of the heavy footfalls. She saw who was coming towards her and gasped.
Seventy Aldean warriors marched in unison. They wore forest green and dark green suits of armor. Some of the warriors she recognized as men from her village. One of the warriors looked her over. She wanted desperately to run, but her feet seemed frozen.
“A half breed, a spyâ€
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Postby Magekind » Thu Mar 24, 2005 1:21 pm

Yes, yes. Looks good. Rather typical Aldean stuff, but that's only if Aldean stuff's typical to you.

Which reminds me, I was going to write a little fanfic that's all about Pain and his little ventures, the part of his story that's missing.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.

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Postby starwarsboy90 » Fri Mar 25, 2005 7:01 am

good Idea! Pain's an interesting character, but since he only appears in certain episodes nd what Ayden does to him, well. By the way, I like how you handled Ayden by the way.
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Aldean Chronicles - Episode 2

Postby starwarsboy90 » Fri Mar 25, 2005 7:05 am

Aldean Chronicles
Episode 2
“Wandering Mediatorâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Fri Mar 25, 2005 7:09 am

“If you would please follow us,â€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Fri Mar 25, 2005 7:10 am

“All of us half-breeds can do this, it just takes time to learn how. Once we reach your father, perhaps he will teach you to become powerfulâ€
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Aldean Chronicles - Episode 3

Postby starwarsboy90 » Sat Mar 26, 2005 8:08 pm

Aldean Chronicles




Episode 3



Deadly Encounter: Lord Vahloren Vs. Aiden Visary





By: Gabriel McKnight

















Chapter 1: Aldea, Relon Continent, Kingdom of Merdia; Year: 3749 B.C.


Sakura looked up and stared at the stars. The stars are beautiful. I wonder if they can talk? she thought.She heard someone take a footstep behind her, she turned and looked up at Vahloren.


“ The stars can talk. If you silence your mind and open up your ears, you can hear them singing praises to the Most High Godâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Sat Mar 26, 2005 8:16 pm

Aldea, Mount Telorva, Kingdom of Merdia; Year: 3749 B.C.


Aiden Visary lay against the trunk of a tree and sighed. It had taken him most of the day to travel up the mountain. It had taken him half of the night to get the possessive, protective Shi’ado Red Guard to leave him alone and stop watching over him. Aiden had an idea to get rid of his pest. He ordered it to track and observe his adversary and the young child. He was somewhat surprised that it immediately obeyed his order. Then again, I have to remember that it has no soul now, due to the magic of the captor card thought Aiden as he looked up at the stars.


Aiden closed his eyes, pulling himself into a trance. With his mind’s eye, he saw an image of a man that looked like him, yet with longer hair. Then suddenly, there was a flash of white light.


Aiden found himself overlooking a plain. He saw trees, mountains and even a stream around him. He looked up and saw a clear blue sky, with a yellow sun shinning down. Where am I? This place is obviously not Aldea, since it doesn’t have nine moons or even a small bluish star Aiden thought.


Suddenly, there was a burst of white light. Aiden turned and dropped his jaw. In front of him was a being of golden energy. White light emanated from the being of energy.




“ Hello young mediator, you have traveled far. Your quest
to bring balance has just begunâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Sat Mar 26, 2005 8:21 pm

“ We will stay here fore one more day. Someone, probably a sorcerer, is pursuing us. We best confront him now before he wrecks our journey any furtherâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Sat Mar 26, 2005 8:25 pm

Aiden looked up at Vahloren in shock. He absorbed my magic, but how? He isn’t
even in his true form thought Aiden. Then it dawned on him. Vahloren doesn’t need to be in his true form. He is half Shi’ado, half Aldean, somewhat like the little girl, Sakura thought Aiden as he studied his adversary.


“ Young mage, you attack me with magic. Magic cannot affect me, not your corrupt version of power, anyways. Only Holy Power can affect meâ€
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Postby starwarsboy90 » Thu Mar 31, 2005 7:48 pm

hmm, no one's reading,lol, or they are just to scared to post a quick reply...
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