They Play
They awaken
They cry
They eat
They giggle
They play
They awaken
They run
They shout
They laugh
They play
They awaken
They chat
They party
They drink
They play
They awaken
They threaten
They terrorize
They kill
They play
They Play
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Now that is an interesting peice. I actually like the point given by it.
Take it like you gave it; what else matters in the end? To be honest, it's all a one-shot test; that leaves plenty of places to go wrong, but how will you ever know? There's a pointer, I will admit. Turn it on, listen to it, feel it burn.
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This might make a cute little children's book if it wasn't for the terrorizing and killing at the end. 
It was pretty good.
On another note, MSP, you should start ONE thread for all your poetry. I noticed that you started a new thread for each and every one of your poems. I think you would get a better response if you do what some of the other poets (Icarus, Rachel, Joan of Arc) do and have your own poetry thread. Just a thought. ~_^
It was pretty good.
On another note, MSP, you should start ONE thread for all your poetry. I noticed that you started a new thread for each and every one of your poems. I think you would get a better response if you do what some of the other poets (Icarus, Rachel, Joan of Arc) do and have your own poetry thread. Just a thought. ~_^
[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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true_noir_chloe - Posts: 3091
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true_noir_chloe wrote:On another note, MSP, you should start ONE thread for all your poetry.
ooooooohhhhhhhhh okay
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wow, ryan i <3 it its so cool! ^_^
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I think Smartypants is creating a new form of poetry! We'll call it...
SMARTY-KU!!!
Even better than haiku!
SMARTY-KU!!!
Even better than haiku!
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ROOOOOOWRRR! Let me try!
They mew
They purr
They sleep
They pounce
They make Ingemar's bed smell of ammonia
They play
That would have been great, Mr. Stupid Pants, if only you were a lady. MRRROWWR!
Tomkyou, this is hardly the time or the place! Good job MSP. It's a good compromise between free and blank verse. It isn't as constrained as blank verse, but it has good structure and unity unlike free verse. You get a gold star.
Job 7:16
I loathe my life; I would not live forever. Let me alone, for my days are but a breath.
I loathe my life; I would not live forever. Let me alone, for my days are but a breath.
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