Jesus Freakes: Year 2603

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 6:56 pm

Jesus Freaks: Year 2603

Zeng had been given an assignment and Jake was to accompany him- nothing new.
â€œKill any Christians you find,â€

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 6:57 pm

Chapter 1

Kai walked east to his village, solemnly, deep in thought.
The â€œHitikori Shaoâ€

Postby **Razgriz** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:05 pm

Quite funny at the end, great job!

Postby **CobaltAngel** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:07 pm

Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! EEEEE!

Great work!

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:07 pm

...there's more where that came from heheh

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:08 pm

CobaltAngel wrote:Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! EEEEE!

Great work!

TY!!!!TY TY TY TY *bows low*

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:10 pm

Sangoku wrote:Quite funny at the end, great job!

I trust you understood all that is going on in the 1st chpater?

Postby **churchgirl111** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:15 pm

Love it eeeeee!
Hopefully kai's cute hehehe
Stupid communism it's in the trash hehehehe sorry teacher says that a lot.....Love the story keep writing....

Postby **Razgriz** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:20 pm

Ruroken wrote:I trust you understood all that is going on in the 1st chpater?

indeed.

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Thu Oct 23, 2003 7:21 pm

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 2:40 pm

Chapter Two

Using the left side of his body, Kai forced his head up, dumping Zeng over on his back.

In a split second, Kai crouched down. With on swift motion by his leg, Kai sent Jake into the dirt.

Both scrambled to their feet. Kai was already poised for attack.

â€œLetâ€™s take him!â€

Postby **Razgriz** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 2:47 pm

Keep going, you're doing good.

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 4:16 pm

Chapter Three

Haiku Shao woke to the sound of someone knocking on the door. Slowly he sat up, his bangs plastered to his face with saliva.
â€œUgh, nastâ€™,â€

Postby **Razgriz** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 4:30 pm

Pretty good update. There are some spelling errors but they aren't too big of a deal. Overall it flows pretty nicely. I like Jean, he is a funny guy, lol. :lol:

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 4:42 pm

yeah he's french.. lol

Postby **JediSonic** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 6:24 pm

Good story! Although, I don't think I quite understood what happened to Zeng..

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 7:47 pm

of course you don't...not yet *evil laugh*

Postby **inkjet1987** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 7:57 pm

Very cool so far! Really enjoying it! Two thumbs up

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 01, 2003 8:07 pm

Eeeeeeeee!!!!!!

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 08, 2003 2:37 pm

Chapter Four

Zeng nervously paced the room, becoming more agitated with every step.

â€œHow am I gonna get out of this one?â€

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 08, 2003 3:35 pm

Note; after getting permission from my sister Mordecai's name is now Haiku

Postby **Razgriz** » Sat Nov 08, 2003 3:38 pm

Good update, keep writing!

Postby **churchgirl111** » Mon Nov 10, 2003 2:21 pm

LOVE IT KEEP GOING!!!
man...i'm getting jealous....it's thousands time better then my writing....

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sun Nov 16, 2003 7:27 pm

i wish i could write faster... i end up spending like fifteen minutes on the next dialogue sentence *sigh* Quality takes time, Does it not?

Postby **Icarus** » Mon Nov 17, 2003 6:11 pm

*stunned* amazing. *faints dead away*

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Wed Nov 19, 2003 4:34 pm

my story isnt really that good is it, icarus?

Postby **Tet-chan** » Wed Nov 19, 2003 6:09 pm

This is great

Here have a drink

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Wed Nov 19, 2003 6:25 pm

ooh is it a hard lemonade? yummy

Postby **Icarus** » Fri Nov 21, 2003 10:58 pm

Ruroken wrote:my story isnt really that good is it, icarus?

Maybe I won't swoon any more, as my constitution has improved, (vitamins and all that) but, yeah, it's good. I really like the Frenchman. His very existence in 2603, in what I'm assuming is Japan, adds a bit of comic relief in what has other wise been non stop atcion. Keep it up.

Postby **Shao Feng-Li** » Sat Nov 22, 2003 2:21 pm

it takes place in northern california lol! besides Jean only has a slight accent... he keeps it up because of his ansesters... you know likw an honor thing... Back in 2003+ people started to keep detailed records of things and such... just so that future generations would know their history

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