Solar Cycle

[Myoti]

I also noticed a few errors. Have you considered getting a beta reader? That might help.

Kinda. My sister read the first one, but I just kinda got anxious to finish and let you guyses see it, I guess. I'll try to go back and fix some of the mistakes, but please, if you see any serious ones, feel free to point them out.

I'm actually kinda glad Burty bugs ya . There's many special little things about him that you won't find out till much, much later on, so I won't spoil anything.

Also, here's something interesting. I had already planned to make a fox character, but it was my sister who came up with the basis of how she looked as well as her name, Kozette. Just thought I should give crdit where credit's due.

I work on 4 soon. School's almost out for me, so I should have more time to work on it. I've planned most of what will happen, so it's simply a matter of doing it now...

Again, character and weapon suggestions would be helpful. And I'd like to know what you think of Cirrus and the Centurions, as well.

[Photosoph]

I think the centurions were really unique, cool sounding characters. Centurion, with 'cent' like in 'centaur', right? Cirrus sounded interesting as well -I like all the unique and cool characters you're coming up with. Kozette's a cool name. Reminds me of 'Les Miserables'. ^__^ I'm glad you've got a fox character in there too; foxes rock!
Hmm... other character ideas... maybe a frill-necked lizard? Or a komodo dragon-dragon? (<-the repitition is not an error) ^___^ Or... snow leopard... a blue macaw parrot character... or even a pika (small furry mouse-like rodent) or... a squirrel!
Just a few ideas.

[Myoti]

Kozette's a cool name. Reminds me of 'Les Miserables'.

Wow. Um, yeah, that's actuallly where my sister got it from. She's in love with Broadway musicals.

You sure do have a lot of ideas. Look like I'll be working overtime.
I do have a sort of squirrel character already, but it looks like I'll have to work in the others. Somehow...

[Sakura15]

I'm actually kinda glad Burty bugs ya . There's many special little things about him that you won't find out till much, much later on, so I won't spoil anything.

I knew there was a reason why he bugged me!! lol...of course....I can't really say that because I don't know yet lol.

[Photosoph]

Don't worry about using all of those, Myoti! They were just general suggestions in case you're ever stuck for a character. ^_^ I'm glad there's a squirrel character on the way; squirrels are so cute. Hmm... are they classified as pests in America?
I know that there are people who think possums are cute, but they're considered pests in NZ. Personally, I don't really like them. Dad + air rifle + possum = bad memories.

[Myoti]

I'm glad there's a squirrel character on the way; squirrels are so cute. Hmm... are they classified as pests in America?
I know that there are people who think possums are cute, but they're considered pests in NZ. Personally, I don't really like them. Dad + air rifle + possum = bad memories.

Cute, yeah they are... hm, maybe I'd need another character as a squirrel... oh, sorry, just thinking to myself. No, I don't think anyone really calls them pests here. Most call possums that, but my brother gets ticked if you say anything bad about them...

I started on 4 already (yeah!) and may have it done sometime soon. A very cool one, it shall be.

[Photosoph]

That's great to hear! I'll be looking forward to reading the next chapter. Hmm... talking to oneself in a public post is a strange, yet not unknown phenomenon. ^_^

[Felix]

*has finally read part 2* ^-^; sorry...I'm slow about getting around to these things. And now school calls me but I'll read 3 as soon as I can. Keep up the good work!

[Myoti]

Alomst finished 4. Just have to finish thinking up the big fight scene. ;D

[Sakura15]

[quote="Myoti"]Alomst finished 4. Just have to finish thinking up the big fight scene. ]

Yaaaay!! ^^

[Photosoph]

Hmm... big fight scene? How about some sort of junkyard? And someone leaping off a high place onto a tall person's back? Lol. Random ideas that may or may not be helpful.

[Myoti]

Well, it's in a town, but there is a big guy... oops, I've said too much already. O...O

[Sakura15]

Well, it's in a town, but there is a big guy... oops, I've said too much already. O...O

Nooo! you havent said enough! lol..oh well, I guess I'll have to wait..

[Myoti]

Wooh, okay. Here it is. Too tired.

*collapses on the floor*

[Photosoph]

Wootage! Must... read! *begins to read...*
...*scrolls down page*....
...*cough, cough*...
... .... ....
All right, that's enough stalling. Wow, you sure did write a lot, Myoti! That's a really cool idea with the daemon. Excellent work!
\(^o^)/

[Myoti]

Thankees!
Don't know when I'll get to the next one. It's gonna be cool, but pretty violent. O.O
Ooh, said too much again...

I've also got this interesting "group" story idea I want to do sometime on here, and then I have vacation in a week, and then I might have to work (finally).

Ahh, so much. @o*

[Photosoph]

A group story idea? That sounds interesting...
Ah well, it's okay; we'll wait till you have time. ^_^ I hope you really enjoy your vacation!

No, you haven't said enough -you've said too little! j/k. ^_^ But seriously, that's okay; it gives us a small tantalising hint into the next chapter

[Sakura15]

Awesome chapter!

[Myoti]

No, you haven't said enough -you've said too little!

So what'd be too much? Saying there's two vicious kitties that try to kill the group and Felicia's discovers some interesting things about the Daemon? XP

[Photosoph]

Too much would be telling what happens through the whole chapter in one long paragraph that only explains the story without actually being written like it would be in a story. Sort of like a summarisation of the whole plot of the chapter before we read it. That would be too much.
What you've been doing is good -just saying it's going to be pretty violent, there'll be a new character, they'll met someone new, etc. Cryptic things like that are the best.
Saying there's two vicious kitties is okay, although saying they attack the group might be a little much... I was really just joking before when I said you hadn't said enough. ^_^ Just keep doing what you've been doing; it works well.

[Myoti]

I know. I was joking, too. ^o^
I know what's too much, but I thought I might just throw in a little teaser or somethin'.

[Kawaiikneko]

great chapter myoti *o*/ Sorry I didn't comment earlier XD I didn't see you updated. Could you PM me when you update? If that's not much trouble, that would be nice.

[Myoti]

Yeah, I was planning to PM everyone, but I got lazy that day and didn't get around to it. @_@
I'm back now, but I don't know when I'll get around to the story. XP

[Myoti]

Okay, I finally got around to working on the next part, and it should be done... sometime. XP

[Myoti]

Ok, well, I don't feel like I did that good with this one, but whatever. Also, please realize I write this like I'd be writing an anime or manga, so that'll explain alot of the... wierd stuff that happens in it.

Anyways, enjoy!

[Photosoph]

Very cool, Myoti! While I noticed a few grammatical and spelling errors, I think the story on the whole was very exciting; definitely up to scratch with the rest of them. In fact, the battle scenes in this one would probably make it one of my favourite chapters so far -especially the bit where Kozette runs up the earth attack.

[Sakura15]

Wow, that was awesome! ^^

[Silvanis]

*bounces about* CAn't wait for the next installment!! *swoons over Gil and stifles a laugh about Burty's protectiveness*

[Myoti]

Wow, really... not how I expected. If you liked the action in this, you'll crazy for the next one. Recall the four characters at the end? Heck yeah...

Unfortunately for all of you, I'm planning to cut the next part into two seperate ones. *Hehehe*

[Silvanis]

Can't wait!