Super Squiddy...goofing off

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Super Squiddy...goofing off

Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Oct 30, 2003 2:03 pm

EDIT, 6/6: This is a really old script, and I don't use this format anymore. It's done all wrong for an animation; but, at the time I hadn't studied animation script formats. So, please excuse the style - I know it's difficult to read.

Okay, I've gone off the deep end. I enjoy watching cartoons, as well as anime, and have decided I wanted to make an offbeat crime-fighting hero. I love Dav Pilkey and the Powerpuff Girls - don't laugh - and so I thought I would try something away from what I usually write. This is what started out as a joke while I was looking at a pink squid toy from a happy meal. I even have little stick figure drawings for story boards. :lol: What do you think of my cartoon - Super Squiddy?



Super Squiddy (a.k.a. Sarah Squidheart)
Comic/animation

[u]“The Shopping Cart,â€

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Heaven's Cloud » Thu Oct 30, 2003 3:36 pm

lol. Very nice. Is this like those things like the plays, are you going to have a cartoon with it?
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:20 pm

This is the first of a few scenes. It actually develops the character of Sarah Squidheart and a vagabond trio she runs into, who become her best friends in the later scenes, helping her fight crime (or what she thinks is crime). Bob the agent plays a bigger part in the picture and SUASS (watch how you read that :lol: ).But, this really is nothing serious I'm working on. I was goofing off with the idea and started writing panel and script format for a cartoon. I had asked a friend of mine's husband (he wrote Megatokyo) about the format and when I went home I threw this together as a joke for my kids. :lol: I don't think it's a play, however.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby EireWolf » Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:23 pm

:lol: I didn't know you wrote cartoons too! :thumb: You are a woman of many talents.

And Powerpuff Girls rule! :cool:
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:49 pm

Yeah, the powerpuffers! :grin: I write everything. What do you want me to write? :dance:

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Razgriz » Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:55 pm

:lol: lol I like.
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Oct 30, 2003 9:26 pm

Thanks, Sangoku.^-^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Gypsy » Fri Oct 31, 2003 6:27 am

I like Boo Boo Squiddy. :P
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Fri Oct 31, 2003 8:36 am

Boo Boo's super easy to draw, also. Think of a Peanut's ghost costume, only a lot smaller and pink - with ooze trailing behind like a snail. ;)

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Nov 03, 2003 8:55 am

Okay here's some more of Super Squiddy. :lol: I hope you guys don't mind. I'm having fun. :lol: Tell me where I can improve.

Scene 2

[U]“The Perfect Job,â€

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Razgriz » Mon Nov 03, 2003 10:37 am

:lol: very funny, I imagined Tofu looking like an actual tofu.
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Nov 03, 2003 1:29 pm

Actually, Tofu is a 13 or 14-year-old, short and stocky Asian boy, so yeah... I guess he looks like a bar of tofu.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Haibane Shadsie » Tue Nov 04, 2003 12:29 am

Hehhe. I like this! It's cute and funny, and very cartoony. It's very anime-ish, too, much like anime-inspired American kid's cartoons... like Dexter's Laboratory or Powerpuff Girls.

I'm a PPG fan, too. :grin:
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Nov 04, 2003 7:57 am

Thanks Shadsie. Do you think I should post more or let it die?

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Lochaber Axe » Tue Nov 04, 2003 8:36 am

More... More!!! Don't let it die! I like it and I bet everyhere does too. Oh and after I finish an essay for tomorrow Ill be writing more frequently on "Meledriel". Already have the continuation of Part 1 in my mind and sorting it around.
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Nov 04, 2003 10:35 am

Thanks, here's more. I hope this section develops the budding friendship between Greta, Frog and Tofu with Sarah Squidheart. There's some action. KA POW!

Scene 3

[U]“Surprises on the Job,â€

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby purplemoose » Sun Jun 06, 2004 3:54 pm

MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!
I WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
in high squeeky voice-plz
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Postby Aijou » Sun Jun 06, 2004 4:36 pm

^_^;;;;
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Jun 06, 2004 4:36 pm

^___^ LOL, are you serious? This is so old. How'd you dig this thing up?

Anyways, glad you liked it. I actually have more of this, but I haven't worked on it for like half a year. I'm not sure I should make the rest of the writing section suffer through the further adventures of Super Squiddy. *hehe*

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Jun 06, 2004 11:34 pm

This is the last scene for the animation. I based it on half hour shows. It still needs a Premise, which is what you send off for someone to even look over an animation script. I wrote the script with no realistic breaks, since I had never done an animation script before. So, this is what I dug up in my old files.

Anways, for those who asked this is how the first half-hour cartoon would end. ^__^ Hope you like it.


Closing Scene 4


[u][size=100][font=Times New Roman]“You Meet the Nicest People on the Job,â€

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Jun 06, 2004 11:36 pm

Sorry, ran out of room. ^^;; This really is the end. ^___^



OUTSIDE THE MALL A LONE AGENT STANDS LOOKING OVER THE PARKING LOT.



P18 – Agent Bob of the SUASS has his hands across his torso, his sunglasses are reflecting the sunlight. The wind is blowing. He has a non-expressive look.



P19 – Agent Bob turns and walks away. In my homage to John Woo there are a large group of pigeons which shoot into the sky behind Agent Bob.



P20 – Agent Bob, from a behind view, has a pigeon poopy on the back of his hair. This is done for comedic affect.



P21 – Agent Bob, raising his hand from under the breast of his overcoat, pulls out a small caliber pistol, shooting a pigeon out of the sky.



P22 – In a cutaway panel, the pigeon is limping back to the flock.



P23 – The end scene is of Agent Bob grinning, as he walks away into the sunset.



AGENT BOB: You won’t hide for long –-- mutant squid girl.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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