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Postby Photosoph » Fri Jul 29, 2005 10:08 pm

Blade came around the corner and saw Brandon looking over the other side of the ship. Blade glared at the back of his head and looked back at where Teressa and he were talking. Brandon knew Blade was behind him. Brandon looked at the water and fiddled his hand in his pocket. Blade walked up to him.
“Hey buddy! What are you doing?â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Jul 31, 2005 1:17 pm

Whu-Who! Life is sooooo good!^^ *is sooooo enjoying life* Anyhow, my dad let me take the laptop to church today, so I was able to type some. *befor church, not during* I finally figured out how I wanted every thing. If theres a lot of gramer mestakes in the next couple of parts, it's caust the laptop is older, and the MSword dosen't work as good as the one on my compy.

Blade was about to say something when Zell called to them.
"Theirs another ship out here!" Blade and the others jumped up and ran on deck. They looked over the side of the ship and sure enough there was another ship.
Brandon came out and looked at it.
"What is so wrong with a ship?" Blade looked at the ship.
"Were pirates son, and not only that but the pirates of The Dragon’s Mist. We have a big price on our head. Not only do we haft to look out for the law ships, but also bounty hunters and other Pirates. You the first in 4 years to know that we truly exist, and that Spike is a woman. Believe me we don’t want that getting out; if it did EVERYONE would come looking for us."
"Well how have you kept it hidden this long?"
"Well we don’t have the name panted on the side of the ship, we don’t put our flag up unless were in battle. Get from here to there disguised as merchant ships. Other little things like that." Brandon nodded.

"It looks like it’s just a ship that needs food supplies." Spike looked down at them from the upper deck, she closed the spyglass. And walked over to Teressa. Brandon looked to Blade.
"How did she know? Blade pointed to the ships flag and handed Brandon his spyglass. Brandon looked out it to the ship.
"See the flag? It’s white with a green X on it. It’s a flag that cargo and merchant ships carry. Theirs different ones. White flag with a green X means there in need of food, White flag with a red X means there in need of medical supplies, Green flag with red X means food and medical supplies, and so on." Blade explained. Brandon closed the spyglass.
"So…they just need some food?"
"Yes, and were going to help them out." Spike said coming down to the lower level.
"Why? I mean, your Pirates, I didn’t think that they helped others." Brandon said looking at Spike.
"Of course we will help them! And when there not looking we will take any good loot they have!" Spike clenched her spyglass. Brandon sighed and looked towards the ship.
"Hey if you don’t want to help out then stay out of our way!" Spike snapped at him, and then turned to Zell. "Bring our ship over to theirs." Zell nodded and headed towards the other ship. Once they got close Blade called out to them.



The things I made up about the flags is just somthing I thought up and thought it would be cool. If I remember right Lost helped me with it.
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Postby Photosoph » Sun Jul 31, 2005 6:01 pm

Anyhow, my dad let me take the laptop to church today, so I was able to type some. *befor church, not during*

:lol: I was a little concerned until you mentioned that last bit. :grin:

I finally figured out how I wanted every thing. If theres a lot of gramer mestakes in the next couple of parts, it's caust the laptop is older, and the MSword dosen't work as good as the one on my compy.

Do you mean you've figured out where you want the story to go? Anyway, that's excellent that you've figured out how you want everything!
Don't worry about grammar mistakes; I'm sure Lost and I can be your resident thread-dwellers to help you out with that. ^_^ Right, Lost?

Blade was about to say something when Zell called to them.
"There's another ship out here!" Blade and the others jumped up and ran on deck. They looked over the side of the ship and sure enough there was another ship.
Brandon came out and looked at it.
"What is so wrong with a ship?" Blade looked at the ship.
"We're pirates son, and not only that but the pirates of The Dragon’s Mist. We have a big price on our head. Not only do we haft to look out for the law ships, but also bounty hunters and other pirates. You're the first in four years to know that we truly exist, and that Spike is a woman. Believe me we don’t want that getting out; if it did EVERYONE would come looking for us."
"Well how have you kept it hidden this long?"
"Well we don’t have the name panted on the side of the ship, we don’t put our flag up unless were in battle, and we get from here to there disguised as merchant ships. ...And other little things like that." Brandon nodded. <<'...And other'... is just a suggestion.>>

"It looks like it’s just a ship that needs food supplies." Spike looked down at them from the upper deck[b];
she closed the spyglass and walked over to Teressa. Brandon looked to Blade.
"How did she know? Blade pointed to the ships flag and handed Brandon his spyglass. Brandon looked through it to the ship.
"See the flag? It’s white with a green X on it. It’s a flag that cargo and merchant ships carry. There are different ones. A white flag with a green X means they're in need of food, a white flag with a red X means there in need of medical supplies, a green flag with red X means food and medical supplies, and so on." Blade explained. Brandon closed the spyglass.
"So…they just need some food?"
"Yes, and were going to help them out." Spike said coming down to the lower level.
"Why? I mean, you're pirates, I didn’t think that they helped others." Brandon said looking at Spike.
"Of course we will help them! And when there not looking we will take any good loot they have!" Spike clenched her spyglass. Brandon sighed and looked towards the ship.
"Hey if you don’t want to help out then stay out of our way!" Spike snapped at him, and then turned to Zell. "Bring our ship over to theirs." Zell nodded and headed towards the other ship. Once they got close Blade called out to them.


Ooo... an encounter. :) *is very happy.* Go pirates doing classic pirate stuff!
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Jul 31, 2005 6:11 pm

[quote="Photosoph"]

Do you mean you've figured out where you want the story to go? Anyway, that's excellent that you've figured out how you want everything!
Don't worry about grammar mistakes]
Yeah, i've auctly known for a while how i've wanted this to go. I just couldn't figure out how I wanted this part with Molly to go.

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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Wed Aug 03, 2005 1:52 pm

kk, no one is here...<.< OH WELL! I'll just post more^^

Blade pulled out his two poles and pushed the button turning them into maces. He swung the mace above his head and pushed the button expanding it. He swung it towards the other ship. It wrapped around the mast. Zell hopped on the chain and ran over to the other ship. He jumped up pulling out a pole similar to Blade’s he pressed a button which brought out a large blade turning it into a large axe. He swung at the mast of the ship cutting it all the way through. He landed back on the chain, and Blade pressed the button bring the chain back. Zell waived to the girls as he was pulled back to his ship on the chain. They watched as the mast collapsed. Molly turned to Blade and Zell.
“WHY YOU! THAT’S NOT FAIR YOU CHEATED!!!â€
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Postby Photosoph » Wed Aug 03, 2005 5:42 pm

[quote]“Ahoy there!â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Thu Aug 04, 2005 11:15 am

Lol, speeking of flags, I got this pirate flag from Washington, auctly it was Orgen where I got it. But it says "Time flies when your having Rum.: I love it! XD It's got the little scull and crossbobes, but the scull is dringing rum. I should take a picture and show ya all. *well Lost could just come over and see it* Any how, more of the story.



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Postby Photosoph » Thu Aug 04, 2005 7:42 pm

That sounds like the coolest flag ever! XD I like flags -in fact, I'd love to have heaps of them to hang from my ceiling or something.... :drool:

I've read this bit (Spike is such a cool character, btw), but I'll have to edit it later. I've been reading the old version of R.L.Stevenson's Treasure Island and the tiny print has made my eyes tired. -__- Hope you don't mind if I leave the editing for later!

Anyways, thanks for writing more! It's cool to read what you've written, and it's great the way you regularly write on this story. Regular writing is a great habit to form/have, IMHO. ^_^
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Thu Aug 04, 2005 9:10 pm

Photosoph wrote:I've been reading the old version of R.L.Stevenson's Treasure Island and the tiny print has made my eyes tired. -__- Hope you don't mind if I leave the editing for later!

Ah yes, such a good book! *my favorite* I read it a month or so ago. And no problem, you can edit it any time^^


Blade was on his ship fighting with Roxanne who was on her ship. She shot at him which he easily dodged. He swung his mace at her; she ducked out of the way.
“Didn’t your mother ever tell you not to his a girl!?â€
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Postby Photosoph » Fri Aug 05, 2005 5:01 pm

I know -it's great, eh? I'm glad to find someone else who likes it! ^_^ I've seen two movie adaptations of it: Muppet Treasure Island ( :lol: ) and a more realistic version; I enjoyed both. It's great to finally read the book. ^_^

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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sat Aug 06, 2005 12:35 am

Yes...Spike is very interesting....<,<


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Postby Photosoph » Sat Aug 06, 2005 12:46 am

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“Board their ship!â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Aug 07, 2005 2:35 pm

[quote="Photosoph"]I know -it's great, eh? I'm glad to find someone else who likes it! ^_^ I've seen two movie adaptations of it: Muppet Treasure Island ( :lol: ) and a more realistic version]

Muppet Treasure Island: It was ok, you can never go wrong with the muppets. The songs though....*kill me now*

Treasure planet: Cartoon, space, and a cyborg, nothing can get better then that...

Disney's 1950's Treasure island: Except for this. This is the best verson I have ever seen. The man who made Pirate talk what it is, and the best John Silver.

This might be going a little off topic, but auctly Treasure Island has helped me with the pirate stuff. Even though my pirates don't come close to John Silver and the crew in that, the story inspires me. *hugs book close to me*



Brandon dodged a swipe from one of the pirates. He backed up and dodged another.
“Can’t we just be friends?â€
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Postby Photosoph » Sun Aug 07, 2005 6:58 pm

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Brandon dodged a swipe from one of the pirates. He backed up and dodged another. “Can’t we just be friends?â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Aug 07, 2005 9:59 pm

Hmmm other versons.....*_* Must....find...

Spike smiled. “Guess it’s my turn to join the battle.â€
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Postby Felix » Mon Aug 08, 2005 7:32 pm

[quote="Sora"]Spike smiled. “Guess it’s my turn to join the battle.â€
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Postby Photosoph » Tue Aug 09, 2005 3:33 pm

Yeah, their squabbles are cool. ^_^

You got in there before me, Felix! :grin: Good editing.
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Tue Aug 09, 2005 10:54 pm

Ughhhh~~~~ *whines* I no feel good.... -.-~~~
Getting sick on my birthday, just the present I want! <.<*.....Oh well, life is tuff, I got to deal with it. Thank you for your help Felix, but what's this?

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Postby Photosoph » Wed Aug 10, 2005 2:57 pm

Oh yes... I don't think I noticed that... I think I just skimmed through Felix's editing since I'd already read your original post before his. ^_^"
Whoot! S'more! :jump:

Just a note: I found the first sentence a little tricky to understand what you meant... so I just changed it to what I think you meant. :)

[quote]Brandon watched as Molly didn’t even put up a fight, and how with one kick Spike won the battle. Blade walked over to Brandon and leaned his arm on his shoulder.
“Spike's really something isn’t she?â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Thu Aug 11, 2005 11:19 am

Cool! And yes Pirate stories ROCK!!! Too bad theres not more like 'em.



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[quote]“Get them off my ship!â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Thu Aug 11, 2005 8:00 pm

Chapter 5

Brandon looked around the room, it was similar to Spike’s it only had one candle lighting the room. He looked around.
“Hello?â€
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Postby Photosoph » Thu Aug 11, 2005 8:20 pm

[quote]Brandon looked around the room, it was similar to Spike’s it only had one candle lighting the room. He looked around.
“Hello?â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Thu Aug 11, 2005 9:40 pm

“…..â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Sun Aug 14, 2005 12:34 pm

Spike walked up to Blade. He sat leaning in a chair.
“Where’s the boy?â€
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Postby Photosoph » Sun Aug 14, 2005 4:53 pm

[quote]Spike walked up to Blade. He sat leaning in a chair.
“Where’s the boy?â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Mon Aug 15, 2005 1:39 pm

Brandon came out of the ship and on to the deck. Blade looked up from his chair.
“Hey!â€
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Postby Photosoph » Mon Aug 15, 2005 5:47 pm

[quote]Brandon came out of the ship and onto the deck. Blade looked up from his chair.
“Hey!â€
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Postby SorasOathkeeper » Wed Aug 17, 2005 10:41 pm

The ship had reached the town early the next morning, and the crew had replenished the supplies needed. Spike told Blade to stay with Brandon while she, Teressa Zell and Audrey took care of some business. She told the rest of the crew to do as they pleased.
Blade had suggested going into town and shop. Brandon had greatly accepted wanting to explore the new town. Blade and Brandon walked around the town they stopped at.

Brandon’s eyes were the size of plates looking at all the new stuff. Blade poked fun at him saying that he looked like a boy who just saw the presents on Christmas morning. Brandon looked around at the booths. People sold all kind of stuff, from fruits, to jewelry. People walked about shopping and trading.

Blade and Brandon walked by one of the booths that was selling fruit. The vender was talking to someone. Blade walked by and swiped one of the fruits and stared to eat it. Brandon saw this.
“Blade you just stole that!â€
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