A few of my poems, others welcome to post their poems too.

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A few of my poems, others welcome to post their poems too.

Postby Sage_Al-Kahira » Sun Aug 21, 2005 10:35 am

I just thought of this one i really like it.

A Poem about Jesus

Tears of blood drip down my face,
As I look at this unholy place,
Why should someone such as I,
Cry for Jesus who has to die,
Soon I'll be in heaven with thee,
Walking hand in hand Idly.
Where is the Remaining Spring?
Where the waters run so swift.
Am I doomed to wonder? Forgotten? Alone?
Within this Mortal drift?


It'd be all like:
"Hey! You want to come over tonight?"
and they'd be all like:
"Sure! Where do you live?"
And we'd be all like:
"You know that Bio-dome out alittle west in the woods?"
And they'd be all like:
"...:shady: Yeah...?"
We'd say:
"There!"
Then they would slowly back away while we are all like:
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Postby Photosoph » Sun Aug 21, 2005 7:40 pm

Very good, Sage. It's a good subject, too; I've read quite a few poems on a similar subject matter, but they all seem to have an original angle, and it's definitely an important subject. There were a few small spelling/grammar mistakes, but on the whole, good. ^_^
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Postby Sage_Al-Kahira » Fri Oct 14, 2005 11:15 am

Thanks oh and i now fixed the mistakes.
Where is the Remaining Spring?
Where the waters run so swift.
Am I doomed to wonder? Forgotten? Alone?
Within this Mortal drift?


It'd be all like:
"Hey! You want to come over tonight?"
and they'd be all like:
"Sure! Where do you live?"
And we'd be all like:
"You know that Bio-dome out alittle west in the woods?"
And they'd be all like:
"...:shady: Yeah...?"
We'd say:
"There!"
Then they would slowly back away while we are all like:
:P
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Postby Wind » Mon Oct 17, 2005 8:26 pm

this is poem about Jesus too, I thought I would stick with Sage's theme

The Tree

Amazing grace that blessed friend should lay His life down for the likes of me a wretched sinner, a smartmouthed teen. He laid down his life to save a wretch like me. He did it through that forsaken tree as He died he thought of me



Hope you like it, I thought it was kinda good
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Postby agasfas » Wed Oct 19, 2005 6:53 pm

I really like both of y'alls poems. Very inspirational indeed. Remembering how much Christ cares for us really brightens my day. Thanks Sage and Jade :)
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Postby SP1 » Wed Oct 19, 2005 7:50 pm

Not a poem about Jesus; at least, I didn't originally mean it that way:

Flying
High
Like an eagle
Among the clouds

But wait
Look
Far below
A world
Too busy
To notice me
"Those who believe will be saved...so they say. Get it?"
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Postby Wind » Mon Oct 24, 2005 9:53 pm

Here is another poem

Dragon Caretaker

Pure elfin beauty, immortal and fair was the caretaker of dragons, she wore clothes of emerald dragon scale and a helm atop her head, She held a sword in one hand and a scale in the other, the scale to judge the sword to kill, she chose to deem love, gentleness, death, life, joy and sorrow, she chose these as the most important things, everlasting and forever she was the caretaker of dragons and of these things she sought nothingand came to nothingness for she was empty and nothing but a simple caretaker of dragons


I hope you guys like this poem
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Wind 01:55 - O.O

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chatbot 01:55 - Wind asks, Am I shatterproof?
My answer: No

DiamondDragon 01:57 - YAYS, I'M SHATTERPROOF!!!!!!!!

Sparx00 02:55 - Mean loaf is the loaf of the gods

Strafe 01:09 - I'm a hotcake
Strafe 01:10 - I am a very hot cake


rocklobster 01:17 - "What's the point of being an adult if you can't be childish sometimes?"

Strafe 02:38 - ~EWWW BOYS ARE NASTYYYY!~
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