Say It (my "holiday" poem)

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It's Called Christmas (my "nameless winter holiday" poem)

Postby Roll » Thu Dec 01, 2005 10:43 pm

My orthodontist recently issued an announcement to all his customers of a poetry contest. All entries are supposed to be about the "holiday season," and the winner's work will be posted in his office. I decided to submit something that addresses the season's greetings and how I feel about them. I don't recall the name of this poetry style, but there are 10 syllables per line and rhyming words at the end of each. When read as written, however, the rhymes are not very obvious.


IT'S CALLED CHRISTMAS (SO SAY IT)

Season’s greetings and happy holiday!
Here’s a gift for you—oh, and by the way,
if you would be so kind, please remind me
what this day is called. I don’t ever see
or hear it in a store or any ad.
Christmas? I don’t get it. Is Christ a bad
word? Politically incorrect? What?
You don’t want to offend anyone, but
what about those who celebrate God’s Son?
Jesus is, after all, the only one
whose gift of love provides us the way out
of hell. All of us would be lost without
Him. So why the taboo? Perhaps to you
it all means nothing, but what will you do
when you stand before His Father in shame
because you didn’t want to say His name?


EDIT: I'm thinking of renaming the poem It's Called Christmas. What do you all think? Also, should I add the following two lines:

So yeah, that's why I'm making such a fuss.
The name IS important. It's called Christmas.
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Postby TheMelodyMaker » Sat Dec 03, 2005 9:44 am

That's really good. :thumb: Just a thought, but maybe you could call it "It's Called Christmas, So Say It". ^_^
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Postby Roll » Sat Dec 03, 2005 4:22 pm

Hey, thanks for the comments! Combine the titles? Heh, why didn't I think of that? Hee hee!
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Postby Mr. SmartyPants » Sun Dec 04, 2005 7:50 am

that's indeed awesome =D

Add a line where like.... talks about "whos more irrational? a man who believes in a god he doesn't see or a man whos offended by a god he doesn't believe in" or something spiffy like that. Rile people up XD
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Postby yukinon » Sun Dec 04, 2005 8:19 am

if you could find a way to make that rhyme, I'd like to see it, MSP. ^^
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Postby Warrior4Christ » Sun Dec 04, 2005 10:06 am

I likes it. And the last two lines do finish it off nicely.
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Postby Roll » Sun Dec 04, 2005 11:14 pm

Mr. SmartyPants wrote:that's indeed awesome =D

Add a line where like.... talks about "whos more irrational? a man who believes in a god he doesn't see or a man whos offended by a god he doesn't believe in" or something spiffy like that. Rile people up XD



Hee hee! Yeah, really!
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Postby Warrior 4 Jesus » Sun Dec 04, 2005 11:16 pm

Definetly add the last two lines. Very nice poem! Very clever and true! It may even make a good rap song. Yo! (lol)
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Postby Roll » Fri Dec 09, 2005 12:29 am

Hee hee! It's Called Christmas, Yo! The number 1 single!
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